Secrets & Shadows

vigneer: ' hehehe so that gods slave pop Frances want to conquer my Father's country.

[House]

I immediately closed my eardrum. "DAD! KENJI JUST PERSUADE ME TO GO OUTSIDE BEFORE GO TO HOME"

I've read to chapter 56 so far and gotta say books like this are why I love reading, AI's, funny but strong mcs, zerg like aliens and wars. doing a great job with the story keeping it fun and interesting while still building the world and keeping the characters progressing. I hope to be able to keep reading til the end. P.S. looking forward to when it's even more crazy wars.

Very interesting story, I thought the synopsis/blurb could've been crafted better. The story overall was very good, I haven't read a lot of sword wielder stories so when I read this it was really interesting and to the point. Although the pace was a little fast, I think for someone reading webnovel it will catch their attention quickly. The paragraphs are not spaced well enough in my opinion, some are too long and they strained my eyes. Perhaps you can look into that in future chapters.  Speaking of which, the paywall was a little too quick. I wouldn't recommend paywalling it that much unless you plan to write less than a hundred chapters. The writing was good, but sometimes the narrative slipped, like switching from the third-person perspective to the writer's/narrator's. There were no grammar or punctuation mistakes so far, but the use of passive voice was overrated, it got annoying to keep reading them. Perhaps balance them, but otherwise. I can't comment on the worldbuilding yet, but so far, so good. Avoid the info-dumping though, it won't help with a smooth narrative. The characters, Keven and Greg maybe, they sound and feel 2d, not real human. But maybe that was the author's intention to develop them further. the updates seem to be frequent and the development of the story is good enough, so I would say this deserves a 4/5 stars. Kudos to the author and happy reading!

Not bad for a new writer. make a female  mc story.

I really didn’t think I would end up enjoying this book as much I have. Of course some chapters will frustrate you, but it’s very interesting. And I like the fact it’s not predictable. Female is slowly getting her character development. Great work author! I can’t wait!