We've got here a story that involves our MC going from weak to strong. Like the author had said and is acknowledging in his comment, the grammar part is still a bit off, but it's nothing really noticeable. As on WN you need to update constantly, it's common for us, authors, to make a few mistakes, here and there. The premise of the story sounds interesting, and I do love that the author uses the prologue to present to us exactly what kind of world is the MC going to be into. Great job!
The story is alright, but there are a few things that caused the lower score. First, the inconsistencies with Character names. There have been several times where the Name Melissa takes over a character like a virus, and it's rather irritating when it happens.Next is the strangely disjointed feeling timeline. There are several instances where it seems that only hours have passed yet at the same time feels like weeks have. It can be hard to keep track of exactly how long has passed.Third issue I would point out is how Shallow character interaction and relationships appear to be. Some characters play a role and then seemingly vanish never to be heard from again. Overall, it's an OK read so far but it's not a story I can rate highly. Good concept, ok execution. There just isn't enough refinement, consistency, or depth to rate it higher.
90% (didn't actually do the math) of the reincarnation stories have little to do with where they came from. It is simply used to explain why they act a certain way while in this story it's a very important part and affects the story. I also enjoy the change of pace when you have a female main character. Keep up the good work, I hope to see more chapters coming soon!!!
The quality of the writing is definitely above average. The world building is simply short of amazing and the characters are very interesting. I just hope the author doesn't slack and keep putting in their best.
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