Military Marriage in The 1970s Were as Sweet as Honey, and The Scientific Research on Military Wife is on The Big Time

nicely written,hope it continues but doesn't looks like it will

Isnt this just a bad copy of Everyone Else is a ReturneeChinese as always being Chinese.......................................................................

The writing is solid. Good grammar and almost no typos.However, there are few problems I have with the story. First of all, the protagonist himself. He's, for a lack of a better word, boring. He doesn't have a solid goal; he's just drifting. He does want to earn money, but he's not super motivated to do that either. He already has as stable job as a salaryman, so he doesn't need to earn money in-game. There isn't even a major plot line as far as I can tell. So the story is not character driven nor plot driven. It feels more a slice-of-life, but there is no feel-good or enjoying-life moment. He's just grinding.Maybe it will change later and I need to read on, but it's really difficult to stay invested if the protagonist himself is not invested in what he's doing. There's nothing to root for, no overarching mission or goal.This type of story isn't bad, but not my taste. Maybe it will fit better for readers who enjoy a loose storyline, and with emphasis on completing small missions rather than big quests.Secondly, the focus seems a bit off? The title and the synopsis makes it seem like the story will focus on his development as a Halo Paladin. However, the focus is on fishing and cooking. The first few battles are skimmed, and a boss battle comes around ch 15. Everything else is just him fishing and cooking.

its good very good but also with a SLIGHT hint of sadness ok I lied not slight but its still very good and I regret getting even slightly attached to any of the characters and I'm only on chapter 18

This is my first time writing anything other than short stories in school. Please give this a read and tell me what you think about it. All constructive criticism is welcome. Over time my writing will improve. This is going to be a decently long story about Havok and his companions striving to achieve their dreams.

I really enjoy your work! I'd love to stay connected and keep up with your latest creations. Do you have any social media or email? It would be great to be in touch~

Alignment: Righteous (Neutral)

Several seconds later he pulled out an old parchment.