Martial Fist: Adding Points in Dreamland

what true masterpiece it's just mashup of all xianxia cliche , be unique for once

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Я читаю только из-за сюжета, но очень досадно, что все навыки, которые он получает, достаются марионетке, он почти ничего не получает от навыков атаки, поэтому он очень зависит от своего навыка призыва, также очень сильно подавляет силу героя, получил почти самую сильную родословную, получил сильный глазной талант, получил рога одного из самых сильных демонов, но все это дает только потенциал, а не атрибуты

Reviewed at chp93:WQ(3/5) - There are some mistakes(typos, extra words, wrong sentence structures) but it's few and far in between. Nothing amazing but it's readable enough. SD(2/5) - I'm not a huge fan of the pacing of the story. It feels very "jerky". Like a car shifting gears too quick. The plot progression so far has been lacklustre in my opinion. The premise is interesting enough but can't raise the score above a solid 3. Now for the "plot" for those who care, pretty alright. It's decent but not ground-breaking. So far we have a few chps of Selena and MC. It mostly depends on your preference, pretty rough but still quite vanilla.CD(3/5) - I'm torn on this. The MC is interesting enough though frustrating at times. The issue is that the way the author introduces us to him as a character, there are far too many perspective shifts, it's told through flashbacks and having too many in any medium is never a good idea. It's fine to be used sparingly to show past events but thats the issue, here it's used as a tool to convey the MC's char to readers, even worse is it's in parts. It might contribute to that "jerky" feeling I get when reading. Now I commend the author for actually building side characters. For example, Selena and Verona are given a fair bit of screentime and inner monologues to give us an idea of their thoughts and character. This can be a double-edged sword however, as focus might be shifted off the MC. But I'm glad to say the author divided the focus quite well. Now why I'm torn on this is the fact I like the side char building but absolutely abhor the MC's char building itself. It feels inorganic and doesn't flow well compared to how the side chars are shown.US(4/5) - The author seems pretty consistent in his updates and actually responds to his audience.WB(4/5) - The world itself is slowly being built and honestly it would be a solid 3, I gave it a 4 just because it's piqued my interest and is genuinely interesting. The world the author is writing seems mysterious and intriguing, u can't help but think there are far deeper secrets due to the hints here and there. In conclusion, a decent but rough read. The idea is solid but the execution isn't.  The pacing and plot of the story needs quite a fair bit of work, especially with the MC's char building. It just feels completely inorganic to show the character like this. But here's the great kicker, premium chps are locked at chp30. That is going to greatly hurt the exposure this novel is going to get. For the word count of chps, it's just not worth it. I might return to this novel in the future but so far it doesn't look too promising. All the best author and I hope this review helps.

The plotline of the story of interesting. There were a few errors that need tweaking. At first, I wasn't sure who the protagonist was, but as I went on I got a clear understanding. All in all, the external conflict of the story had me continuing to the next chapter. I'm sure when it's polished, it'll be an amazing novel. 👍Keep up the good work, though

<p>She looked up at him: "Is there anything else, Grand Master?"</p>

As she turn towards the kitchen, Maine's gaze passed by the lone customer who is hunched on the table, still busy with his phone. She then shrugged.

Di sebuah Restaurant tidak jauh dari kantor, Mei dan Mu Fan memesan beberapa menu makan siang. Disaat yang bersamaan Mei melihat seseorang mirip seperti Juan yang sedang bertemu seseorang.