LlLY (GL)

Enjoying the chapters. Keep them coming

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This is the worst story ever.He ends up in Africa, eats a fruit and immediatly turns into some godly being that is able to challenge mihawk. Made up powers that he instantly got without explanation occur multiple times.Also you randomly mention a superpower after a few chapters without explanation.Your story just makes absolutely no sense.The pacing is all over the place.

So far ive Read 43 chapter its an good and has amazing potential but i think there are some thIngs that need to fixed:1. Mcs control over is emotions when he fights bc he kills without thinking and causes quite a lot if problems for his family trying to “protect” them, if he continues like this he’ll be the reason for their deaths.     A why to fix this in my opinion which i                 think is absolutely nessecary any way is a skill i call “absolute control” (absolute control over his mind,body,and arua) is goes with his title of an assassin and the author has mentioned he is not in control of his mind 50% and is suppressing an inner monster in which will get rid of these problem or at least help2. repeative fighting style for 2-3 chapter per fight i can pretty much sum it up for in 3 words... dodge,strike, and kill. for 400 years of fighting its pretty bland so i propose :      A skill i call “god of mastery” its use is simple he gets instant mastery towards any martal arts and cold weapons but the priority will be daggers,katana, ninjato, bows, and needles/posion,ect.And 3. which think would be a great skill “phantom/light manipulation” a skill in which is he intangible to physical to at a certain amout and can also conseal his arua and only those that are stronger then him can sense him/ his mana. he can also become one with a shadow or become invisible.This is my first a probably last review like this so hope it good. :)

Its criminal that this book doesn’t have a full 5-star rating. This is an amazing book which brings you into its world and leaves you wanting more. If (like myself) all you’ve been consuming recently is power-fantyasy system novels this is the thing to restore your faith in webnovels and their ability to make you more than a system novel junkie. Also my favourite part is that the main character has secrets that even we, the readers dont know yet. Serious intrigue.

The best novel from this batch.                                                                                                            .

Some good stuff, keep up the great work