House of the Celestials: The Twilight Crown

in his wings. And you will go free."

"Shirone please," Kuroka sounded exceedingly dejected.

He was running out of time but he could not solve the mystery around her.

     The chair electrocute me and shocked me. "Okay, Carl, do you remember anything now?"

Love it, great idea. Takes the classic isekai trope and gives it a fresh/unique spin with 1 question that every reader has thought of at least once:“What if I could go back and forth between the 2 worlds?”Keep the chapters coming. This story needs/deserves a proper story arcs and an ending/epilogue.

i think it's good and you guys should give it a chance

Very interesting story, I thought the synopsis/blurb could've been crafted better. The story overall was very good, I haven't read a lot of sword wielder stories so when I read this it was really interesting and to the point. Although the pace was a little fast, I think for someone reading webnovel it will catch their attention quickly. The paragraphs are not spaced well enough in my opinion, some are too long and they strained my eyes. Perhaps you can look into that in future chapters.  Speaking of which, the paywall was a little too quick. I wouldn't recommend paywalling it that much unless you plan to write less than a hundred chapters. The writing was good, but sometimes the narrative slipped, like switching from the third-person perspective to the writer's/narrator's. There were no grammar or punctuation mistakes so far, but the use of passive voice was overrated, it got annoying to keep reading them. Perhaps balance them, but otherwise. I can't comment on the worldbuilding yet, but so far, so good. Avoid the info-dumping though, it won't help with a smooth narrative. The characters, Keven and Greg maybe, they sound and feel 2d, not real human. But maybe that was the author's intention to develop them further. the updates seem to be frequent and the development of the story is good enough, so I would say this deserves a 4/5 stars. Kudos to the author and happy reading!

I have read your other works and hve loved them . looking forward to this too...going good so far....goodluck