Loki let out a sigh as he looked down at his Rykar, who was exaggeratingly snoring as saliva trickled down his lip. "Dumbass. Ok, stop messing around. How did it actually go?"
Good start, not super original, but promising. The only complaint is the quality of the translation. It feels like MTL posted raw, no human editing. Too many mix-ups in gender pronouns, female characters routinely get referred to as "he
I'll finally give myself 5 stars, like other authors do.Why am I writing this now? To inform you about my, at first, inconsistent writing style. Initially, I used my work as a progression tracker, but now I feel some connection with it.Really, I wanted to improve my writing with this being a 'side project', and it is visible each chapter.Spacing, vocab, logic, character development, and, mainly, the thoughts and feelings deepness — everything improves steadily, at some point I dare to say exponentially.When you start reading my work, please, bare with the pacing and, sometimes, unusual writing style. I feel the story itself evolves quite well and also develops significantly more in the future chapters.
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