This book will be better if it had a good proof reader because the way it change from his to her is just too much man is hard to know who is meant to be talking sometimes
Bah! What sort of trashy forced plot is this. For the next few days I’m going to do a mandatory 1 star review to spite webnovel for picking this trash!
This story starts out really great, but if you are here for the calm, lazy and fluffy (with delicious rice, tea and cute pet) ambiance (like I was), you will be in for disappointment. Having read ahead in the raws, the MC's personality starts to resemble that of Warlock of the Magic World more and more (so if you love the ruthless, no loose ends-no sympathy-no nonsense MC, this is it for you).
Your story holds potential. I can see that you have a very clear image in your head of how your story looks and plays out, but due to a lack of rhythm in your writing, a protagonist that could be better developed, and repeated grammar and sentence structure mistakes, it fails to come across. Overall, I believe you can get there. You just have to keep practicing. You might want to consider hiring an editor, a least until your English improves. I wish you the best of luck!
Writing Quality: Your writings understandable and readable with punctuation and grammar (better than 80%-90% of novels) and there's little to no spelling errors I've seen for now.Stability: Can't rate it well because there are only 3 chapters but it's looking good so imma give it the benefit of the doubtDevelopment: You've shown what the MC is capable of early on and shown what his eyes and wishes can do and the benefits they grant in 2 chapters which many fail to do with 10.Characters: Your keeping to the strength based world like the soul refinement guy looking down upon those weaker then him and his enemies giving up cause it's hopelessWorld background: Story is holding up and looks like your adding kingdom aspects into this (which is my sweet tooth) along with the steady development of the world instead of jumping 20 chapters every 3 lines
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