From Failure to SSS-Rank: The Demon Lords Rebirth

i have good expectations but author perfectly destroyed it . power system is damaged in this novel . your brain will blow up every chapter you read until you stop thinking or reading . i choosed second option

Ceritanya unik beda dengan novel kultivasi yang biasanya alur ceritanya hampir sama dan diulang-ulang.Apalagi awal cerita dimulai dari dunia tingkat tertinggi, bukan seperti biasanya dimulai dari dunia tingkat rendah dengan keluarga kecil

I agree with akhbar 89 this novel is confusing and tries to add way to much information withought consolidating there  ideas l. I admit I only read the first 15 chapters and even that was a chore,however so many issues have popped up that makes it hard to read. 1st the status of the mc makes. no since, he is a tranmigrator that somehow also knows of the most popular vr  game "War" major players even though his suppose to be from a different world. He is supposedly the world maker/ system while at the same time blending in as a average character who is barely above the  supposed professional gamers. what realy got me is he complained about not getting a specialized class advancement event hough easily starts recommending hidden classes to other players and he supposedly designed the hundreds of classes.2nd its way to confusing abouight if this is another world in invading physical  plain, virtual world game impacting physical  world, excedra3rd character development is terrible. as of so far character development is pretty much , oh this person is... profession player in war as ...class , so they choose .. class. 4th in my oppion the real world elements makes this novel feel  dull , as it  seems to me it results in alot of  deposition that will likely be pointless in the future; when suddenly the novel goes back to the action  the characters have suddenly leveled up alot. it for this primary reasons I find this novel confusing and can not recommend it.

I've read so many generic eastern fantasy novels that I just can't read any more of them but this , this is gold 24 carat gold I would recommend this to any eastern fantasy fan it might seem generic but so far I haven't been bored it's entertained me also it's actually funny at times unlike TSS I still don't get why people like that garbage ( it's just my opinion chill)

Okay, I read some chapters but for some reason, I cannot establish a clue about what your story is really about.TLDR, here are my strengths and weaknesses for your novel.Strengths: Unique genre. Good representation of the premise.Weaknesses: No knowledge of plot structure. Lack of description of what the story is all about along with scenes.I know for a fact that this novel falls under the sports genre, so I was expecting fast-paced action scenes of the players or something similar. I didn’t see any of it in the first chapter.I suggest describing the scenes (for example, describe the office’s appearance) and adding context to your chapters. When making chapters, there needs to be an objective of what you are trying to portray to the audience. You need to convince people to read your book.I tried to understand some characters, like Jeff, for example being the boss, but for some reason I cannot flip the page because I keep reading scenes without any context of what it is all about.Also, please improve your book title, so I can have a clear picture of what your book stands for.I appreciate your desire to represent the world of sports in novels, but for now I just can’t read the rest of it because of it lacking a clear foundation of what it is about.But you shouldn’t give up. Sports isn’t my thing, but knowing you want to represent it through your novel is making me want to read more. That is, if you revamp/rewrite your book.Good luck on your writing journey by the way, and feel free to message me in the forums should you have any questions.

The Story is Amazing and the Alternate Timeline of the Story is Progressing, The update on the Chapters needs to be improved a bit, can't wait for the part where Tzeentch, will join his brother to the Old World, and more reactions of every force's faction in the Old World, when they find out about the 4th Brother, which will be the champion of Tzeentch

"The way I see it, they need to play around their Gatling. Sharpshooter is stronger but based on pure dps, Gatling is stronger. They can even get double the value by denying Rocket classes and using them to buff the Gatling."

Raven paused and then asked with some hesitance, "That will take a long time, don't you think?" He looked over to the large stack of tomes on the desk. From cover to cover, that many would take at least a week, possibly longer. Plus, he could safely assume that all of the manifests were all hand written. He could easily miss something if he wasn't careful...