Fractirea | Faraway Paradise

YOU ARE THE DEAD i Got the chills so many times while reading it!!

At the moment the he novel is at about a 100 chapters, and I think it's fair to give it a review now. For starters the novel greatly exceeded my expectations. I expected some more lame-ass faceslapping, but for once I got a decent fan-fic. Yes that's right, fan-fiction. Lets be clear, this sure as hell is written by a football fan as fan-fiction, with tons of known players like fabregas, bale and Walcott making guest appearances, alongside some imaginary players. It isn't bad at all, in fact it's fairly decent, the plot goes on nicely, and it has a nice and peaceful atmosphere. It reminds me a lot of those kingdom-building novels, as that really is what it is. We watch Tang En, or Tony Twain, or TT as I like to call him build a football empire. We watch as he picks up to be pro players, and builds some players himself. It's a light entertaining read with some amount of info-dumping and discoursing upon football tactics.Now on to the bad. Yes there are problems. Any and all conversations feel robotic as ****, and really weird. They don't sound like humans, but more like NPC's interacting. There are equally weird filler arcs, where our main character accidentally kidnaps a loli, and barely evades the FBI. Clearly filler. Character development can get weird at times too. In short the writing is fairly terrible. THe characters themselves however, do have personality. That itself is itneresting, though bound by stereotypes the author believes in.

The author uses a variety of methods to keep the reader reading… I also have a theory on what Josh Malum is. Although we don’t have enough information I was thinking about this since chapter 150. From the beginning we can tell Josh will become over powered. A strange detail was the iteration which was like 100,000(I forgot) an iteration is practically a loop.. it’s also known that the author likes incorporating details from different novels like naruto, sonic, etc… we know from the become that Josh Malum is classless but not really, his class is Josh Mother##### Malum… I believe that since classes are inherent memory’s from hero’s, somewhere in the future he is able to get these memory’s which is why he has such godly talent in a way.. the author says he is just an ordinary guy with a strong will, but let’s be honest… hard work doesn’t always beat taken. I know for a fact I might be missing something, but maybe others could take my theory and change it to their liking.

Don't stop please 😢.......................................................................................................................

very stable with updates, and to be honest it is a good story. HOWEVER , the writing is a bit funky, and grammer is pretty bad. not to the point it's unreadable , it can be enjoyed with a bit of effort. mc starts out horribly stupid however,  and honestly the first 10 chapters will likely give you an aneurysm. character decisions do improve though.  highly suggest Author find an editor though,  it honestly the biggest thing holding this back.

I really really like the story, its funny, and the maids are brilliant however the translation quality is rivaling the worst MTL Ive ever read. It frequently mixes up gender pronouns like shes into hes and sometimes will simply shorten sentences into something completely unintelligible. If anyone knows where I can find the raws to this theres a 9/10 chance itll be better translated because I really want to read this but the qualitys so poor.

This is the author's mental dump place, I mean, maybe you'll find good stuff? First Volume consists first version of Moon Rabbit: Threaded FateSecond Volume will consist of the mental dump, you know, just good old fashioned narcissism? But yeah, maybe some interesting thoughts on characters and letting you guys know I'm alive lol

I give five stars to this.....     really creative......     I recommend this novel to be highly recommended..... 🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩.. the use of words are so precise and intended....