Farming in the Beast World, Leading the Whole Tribe to Prosperity

"Dad," Ezra mouthed.

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Second ritual Panigrahana - a ritual in presence of fire, where Jamarion takes my hand as a sign of our union. Panigrahana is the 'holding the hand' ritual as a symbol of their impending marital union, and the groom announcing his acceptance of responsibility to four deities: Bhaga signifying wealth, Aryama signifying milky way, Savita signifying new beginning, and Purandhi signifying wisdom. Jamarion was facing west, while I was sitting in front of him with my face to the east along with Mummy and Dad, he holds my hand while the following while the Pandit was chanting Vedic mantra. Then he tied Mangal sutra and filled my center partition with bethoral sindoor (vermillion). Mangal sutra is a black and gold beaded necklace with a gold or diamond pendant. It is believed that Mangal sutra defines that the girl is now married.

It was easy for him to recognise his daughter.  She is like her mum, his Jane.  

"Ah, Kristen! You're feeling good, my sister?"

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It was my friend Veronica. She knows about me so I tell Scarlett to come out, she come out and   

"So you went and find me just because of that." Minato filled in the blanks dryly.

And all that glitters is gold

Ok I am gonna give it straightFirst 30 chapters almost garbage from a readers perspective Are they important to the story? Yes very important. They set an important framework for the whole story. The story after that is quite enjoyable, I binge read all the way until I caught up with the story.The reason I have such disdain for the first 30 chapters is that, we as the readers have no context , who is Ryan? Asmodius? What blessing? Who is the girl? Why every girl wants to hit Ryan?I really wished I had clear info abt this story construction from the synopsis. Also the synopsis dosent really cover the actual of the story at all.Good thing abt the story is that the writing quality is pretty decent, unless there is major info dump. There is enough intrigue to hook the reader. I concept of the book is quite intresting.Some problems I would say are that there are too many characters introduced too early and at once. As a result everyone has a shallow personality. Currently only 2 people in the story have a proper personality: Ryan and Arian. Other than everyone else is superficial. Also this is clearly not a villain novel yet, bad marketing is never good.Some recommendations(you know best author, these are just personal opinions)More slice of life chapters: like mc and Selenea went on a ‘date’. You could have taken this aspect slow. Give us more perspective on what he is feeling which walking with her, them asking questions about each other. Maybe it will actually give an idea why Ryan started falling in love with Selena cause all I see is he got forced to say she is is gf, she bullied him into going places, she life when he complements her.Another thing I would say is add a few filler chapters, this adds on to the Slice of life aspect. Like mc talking abt the sword he got or a chapter abt him finding out that the fairy is enslaved by the earring. I am just saying the story does not need to go from one bug event to the next. You can slow down a bit and build the world.Also dial down the annoyingness of the mc. He has experience of 20+ years due to his 2 life’s. He dosent need to act childish or immature when talking with every single character.I would also appreciate chapter from other chapters pov(not too many but enough to give an idea)Again I am not saying the story is bad. I am just saying it is not refined enough to reach his full potential.

They say not to judge a book by its Cover, the covers pretty damn fire, Now I do love me some transmigration and the book delivered slight grammatical errors and such but its a banger start.

This story looks promising . I'm liking it very much . can't wait to read next