"Well, Lucas told me all about you and i don't think a child with parents would be walking on the streets like you were. I'm also sure it would be quite beneficial for you to learn more about your stand as well as James' and Lucas' stands, or even mine." The matron asked while giggling a little at their shocked faces.
This story has good potential, not so good grammar but still I can see something for it. Now granted, this story gets more views that power stones or reviews but don't stop writing, I took the time out of my day to review this.
the idea isn't bad it's just lacks proper execution , the first mistake u made is not giving the main character a proper backstory at the beginning of the story , a backstory allows us to know why the mc is so resourceful in the wild ,how was he able to sneak up on the boar without being noticed , it lets us know what kind of character the mc has and it lets us know why the mc has good looking physique without a proper backstory it makes everything the mc does feel like it's coming out of know where , also your main character is coming to conclusions to fast without proper explanation or thinking , I Can except if he guessed he was transmigrated , but the mc shouldn't have figured out he has soul magic by just using it once and progression with the power is a litt little bit to fast , also the mc is in wilderness , creating a harem of beast girls should be the last thing on his mind , it makes him look like somebody who doesn't have common sense and him thinking of turning an animal into beast girl is weird and out pocket, if u wanted to add that sheep girl , u could have just had the MC turn the sheep into waifu by mistake or accident , that way u could have added the sheep girl and it wouldnt make the main character come across as an idiot and its less weird as for the rest , there are too many chapters for how little the story progressed , these 10 chapters can easily be compressed to 4 chapters . That's all i have too say , u have potential u are just not using it properly let me give u advice , anytime u write a chapter , read it before hand and ask yourself is there anywhere i can improve and making it better or more exciting
Ascendant of Abyss is an interesting Isekai story following a young man taken down in the prime of his life. After meeting with a deity who shows disdain for the Tatsuya, the main character, he is banished to another world where he wakes up as a ghoul. I think the story avoids making the main character too powerful too quickly, and found the addition of the secondary character Yuki to be a wonderful addition. I look forward to reading more as it releases.
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