Edge Of The Frozen Dawn - A New Life (Volume 1)

Danger always lurked around them, because his other name was trouble.

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Ah feelingku jadi gk enak setelah mendengar kelanjutan obrolan mereka bahwa siswi itu adalah perempuan.

You'll never shine if you don't glow

The language used in the synopsis creates some tension that could engage the readers.You make use of adjectives to your advantage by writing them in the right places, giving information about the characters without having to straight up describe It to the readers.The presentations of the Suryavanshi family (aside from the protagonist) are not introduced smoothly in the story. The writing acomplishes to transmit fairly the personality and emotions from the protagonist.It manages to make the reader wonder about the main character's past as It seems to be something that still has relevance in the present.The two last paragraphs shift from ,1srt to 3rd person in narration and It appears a tad disruptive even if the paragraphs in itself are wonderful.While the different narrators and their personalities can easily be distinguished by what's written, the main tool used is plainly explaining everything they think and how they are, and therefore the story's pace becomes quite slow. However, I appreciate that the male narrator gives off the impression that he's somewhat poetic or romantic a side from being hurt. Mostly for the way he talks, and the reader is subtlely warned of his extremism/desperation.The story could benefit from some more little actions that show the reader how they are. In the chapters that follow (chp. 4 and up) the depiction of personality, opinion and vibe improves and the main character's develope more!Seems like drama and catastrophe are about to happen at any time!

Hehe. I don't knowBut this is good one.Bye

After reading the title and the synopsis im hooked but i just have one question can mc obtain a never ending lifespan?

One of the things I don't like about this novel is the constant holding back nonsense.If you're superior to your opponent, it just becomes uninteresting if you hold back all the time. Just crush them with strength so overwhelming that it makes reader's and the people in the story understand your dignity, esteem and that you're not a force to be trifiled with. And seriously  2 chapters just for that fight with Iaeptus got me fuming, especially since he could've finished the fight earlier.I'm truly hesitant to even spend coins on this for fear of of disappointment and rage.