Eden Transmigration

Dude are you a 15 year old Virgin or what? Why are you continually butchering your own novel. If I was pointing an Uzi at you are you going to use a club instead of the rocket launcher on your back. Well that's what you're doing with your MC. You're ruining a perfectly good idea and theme for what plot holes. As OCD as you are about your flavor text you drop the ball for everything else. Maybe you should stop writing novels and go to work for enix and write flavor text for their video games.

From chapter 171 onwards it's straight up unreadable, the translation quality took a deep plunge into the abyss, it's no different from mtl now.

Well I got to the chapter that is released for free so I will give an honest criticism about this story.About the world: history has much to explore, since in 39 chapters the protagonist has not yet left his tower to explore and is only aware of practically two races that appeared near his tower.Based on that, history still has a lot to offer and explore.Development of the Story: the protagonist carries with him a tower leveling system (which is not very weak but is also not OP) where practically everything the protagonist will do will revolve around this tower system.The flow of the story progresses very slowly where the problem that the protagonist has with the werewolves in (Chap. 2) has not been even close to solving in (Chap. 39).I believe that the biggest problem in this story is the first 10 chapters where it appears that some details are missing or that something was skipped.Example chapter 1 itselfThe protagonist takes everything as if it were the logic of a game (where it gets to be irritating at a certain point) and also the protagonist's own attitudes are quite questionable. Your decisions and attitude makes you wonder if the protagonist really has an ***** mindset.In short, a cowardly protagonist with a sense of inferiority who apparently never goes to hand his women.2/5 star in character just because of the incompetence of the protagonist.Details aside: the story is from Harem where in 39 cap the protagonist already has 4 girls. The story also has a lottery system (Gacha) very seen in a mobile game so the protagonist must get more allies (girls) from that system.

A time traveller who has perfect memory about music and films or whatever, and acts like he knows how much they're worth but then is stupidly surprised when he finds out. Tries his best to act like a scammer for some reason despite it all being legit... It's really, really dumb, idk what the author was thinking writing it in such a manner, maybe going for some poor excuse at comedy.

Brother your dialogues need massive work. Most of the time the conversation doesn't has any emotions. Also you need a editor asap. This thing is barely readable

A friend of mine recommended me this and I thought it was going to be some boring story but guess what?! I was left speechless and eager for more chapters over chapters.

it has great potential but there are some things that are just stupid             why this novel is bad 1 abilities are op when they are just common example: an archer goblin has a skill that makes you invisible If you are still and not breathing I said why it is op in a paragraph comment when it got introduced(it basically is perfect for ambush  hiding and confusing your enemy) archer goblins have a skill called archers reinforcement or something it gives an enchantment to ALL weapons not only bows all weapons a sage has a skill that shows every living being in 100 meters ( it hard counters assassin's with stealth making them useless and remember this is a common skill and  there are like 5 more ranks) 2 the mc can hit small targets from a distance with a bow without missing when it's the first time that he uses one ( he doesn't have any skills that help with aiming or stats that help yet) the same with a sword he became an expert with 1 hour of experience3 I found an exploit 😂 when he enslaves a monster ( with a skill) he can give it a name when it  gets a name it evolves meaning it gives more xp when killed and also gets an additional skill which he can devour 😂 my opinion of the novel: if you don't care if the system or character makes sense read it if you don't like bad quality go as far away from this piece of art :)

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