This novel had a great potential but author destroyed it by his own hands. This is typically a Skyrim a Skyrim fanfic. Zero realism and world building (initially there was some, but author wanted to ruin it so badly). *spoiler* After tutorial arc since there are no deaths, people can revive unlimited times, there is literally no thrill at all. Author does not have any idea where to lead the story. whimsical writing. MC literally does not have any advantage for having dual. Instead he is weak, gets overpowered by enemies time to time. Even other players who don't have any advantage technically, can easily give MC hardtime for his life. This story was not meant to be written by this author is all I can say. Totally wasted potential.
So it’s that time again I have been force- ahem persuaded to once again drag myself out of my cave and review a story. I would like to say this is based on my opinion so take what I say with a grain of salt.Writing quality- for me five stars it’s clean I didn’t notice any errors that hampered my reading and no spelling mistakes were particularly noticed.Stability of updates- again five stars i would give it more if I could since this is the authors second novel which he is updating with his first.Story development- I gave this category four stars this is mostly due to lack of chapters since ideas differ vastly from execution though I will fully admit I like the presented idea of the novel and it’s current progression hence the four stars. Character design- for me it’s five stars I will say I’m not picky. I don’t even need a design for characters to work in my head, but I know some people are rather particular with getting an image so I encourage you to read it and see if it works for you or not.World building- for this I gave it four stars like story development there just isn’t enough for me to say it is amazing though it is brilliantly mysterious and so far consistent though this might change in the future though I hope it doesn’t.Now with Webnovels categories out of the way it’s time for my thoughts and opinions that didn’t seem to fit in any of them. First whilst I’ve said some very nice things about this novel there are some things that bugs me indefinitely that I can’t gloss over like some other choices. The major gripe I have and that’s the author tells a lot to the readers there is little to no inferring of character traits and characteristics of the cast since it’s told straight up with out any subtly. Which I found personally annoying especially when it’s repeated. Though it doesn’t detract from the story. I also so understand that it could just be a style choice and I’m just not clicking with it particularly.Another thing that is related to the a fore mentioned point is that we are told about character moments and that could be fun and show off the characters of Leo and Morganna especially they get shoved to the side with a couple lines of exposition whilst I suspect that this is due to the author wanting a certain pacing of the novel it still feels like a waste of potential of exploring the characters.Right onto something else that I have a slight distaste for character bipolar disorder whilst a lot of the characters are great they are fun to read about as they explore the new world.There is one character that I don’t sit well with and that’s the main character Leo himself aside from the authors Infamous brand of naming (curse you Cruz) the thing i am against is how he shifts seemingly out of nowhere at first he’s introduced as a self proclaimed bastard of a person he isn’t Voldemort evil but he happily sells away the souls of gamers for the chance of resurrection. The only problem I have with this is that he seems to care too much by the people that jump into his game. There isn’t an arc where he learns the benefits of being nice to people he just seems to suddenly care about the players which In my eyes doesn’t fit his established character of being unscrupulous to achieve his dream. I don’t know maybe it’s just me.In conclusion it’s a very fresh story exploring something mystical with a very fun cast of characters. It’s something I would recommend if you enjoy a more mysterious style with a system that is different to the usual whilst I am at odds with something’s in this novel it doesn’t detract from an entertaining read plus my name makes a cameo so there’s that. Now hopefully the author will remove the gun from my head. Pretty please.
Hey there!Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Honest review (Ignore the rating)Also, pin this author.Alright, where should I start?The writing quality is fine. A few grammar mistakes here and there, but it's readable. Updates are perfect and sometimes go on a hiatus but that's fine since all authors do that. The story pace is perfect, though it leans on the accelerated part a bit. The designs of the characters are alright and the world background is gradually explained at a pace you are able to understand.In my opinion, I say this is a great novel. The first few chapters (Probably around 30 chapters) are very meh, but they provide handy information. After that, the story gets better from there.That's pretty much it...Also, the smut chapters are very enjoyable... if you know what I mean...
Popular Reviews