"No deary, atleast nor to my knowledge."The matron told him"Alright then, Let's go find Lucas." James' said to Jake, on the walk to the orphanage they had become sort of friends considering the similarity's they had between their personality's and interests.
Very fun to read, update rate is fast and siri has a real personality here. Most importantly, mc isnt a soul reaper! I have been getting sick with fanfics not exploring the hueco mundo
A captivating storyline, thrilling suspense, and masterful wordplay—I’m eagerly awaiting Chapter 5 to see how it all unfolds! Each twist keeps me guessing!
Potential! I must say, it is exciting diving into the world. While it's not without flaws, the potential of the plot and promise on display are certainly good.Writing - Needs improvement. A lot. But it's readable, understable and sufficient. Still, if the author can improve the writing by a level or two, it will be amazing. Tip- Focus on some realistic reactions from characters, situations and such. Plot- Since there isn't much of plot given till now, I have considered it's potential. If The author plays it right, the plot can become a great piece among 'system' contents.Character - Dialogues! they make or break the characters and it is good to see, character have plenty interaction. Well done there. Just needs some refinement.World Building- Although not unique in its genre with systems, ranks, monsters, etc. I could understand the world quite a lot from the first 15 chapters. So, I would say it was done great. Well, there is more to explore in future, so I belive again in it's potential.Overall, it is a good story. Needs editing and refinements, but still enjoyable.
Starting from the first click I made on this book, right to its current last chapter, it is easy to see that author has put a significant hardwork into this work, and he truly has written something brilliant.I hope it doesn't get buried under a pile of junks and gets to shine like it truly deserves.Keep up the good work Author.
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