creations of aurther world

This scene left him in utter shock. He doesn't know what to do but he felt sudden tightness in his chest seeing her cry like this.

We pass through the barrier, and suddenly, it is chaos. Homes burn furiously as some of the nymphs tries to extinguish the fires. Not long after, we see the roots of this mess – the Undead. With a ball of flames, they throw it everywhere as they cause havoc.

wanting to protect this place my hand can reach

Fei Shuang slowly exposed traces of a smile, she was not in the mood because she's been consoling Miss Long all morning not to worry too much for their departure. It wasn't like they would never see each other again...

[Wa'alaikumsalam...]

[Well... no... we were all sealed a long time ago, during the great war.]

Hey now, you're an all-star, get your game on, go play

'This was probably what he was going to do yesterday...'

I sighed. "So Writerz, have you done the homework?"

I loved TGV(the author's previous work).Sure, many took it as NTR coz they had 0 braincells fueling their brain, many had problems with other parts of the story, but to me, the story itself was a masterpiece.What brought TGV down was the instable update rate, and the subpar writing quality.So yeah, I openly blame the author for ruining my experience with TGV.I was apprehensive to start this, worrying it would just be a repeat of TGV. Well, partly, no.The updates are stable(tho it doesn't say much since there are only 15 chapters out rn), and the writing has improved.What is a problem however, is the POV. The novel is written in 3rd person POV, since a majority of WN seems to dislike 1st person POV for some incomprehensible reason, this works in the favor of readers.However, the author decides to use first person pronouns like 'my' more often than not while narrating. It may seem like a minor issue, but while reading, a sudden disparage in the POV like this can be extremely immersion breaking.That aside, the story itself, along with the characters is very good. There isn't much to say seeing as how there aren't much chapters out yet, all I have to say is that give this story at least 7 chapters before you decide whether to continue or drop. The intro is done by that part, and you will get an idea of what to expect going forward.Since this novel managed to pick my interest, I will be looking forward to reading more of it while hoping the author doesn't mess up again. And hey, imo, the story is worth the chances.

  Story is well written, and has quite a bit of future potential. Just remember this though, if you yourself, enjoy writing your stories, then that is the one thing that should matter the most more then anything else. Sometimes, it is not about any sort of money or payment, but should in fact, always be about enjoying sharing your work with your viewers and fans. And that, should always take priority, because if you fans and viewers enjoy reading your work, as well as potential future generations, then that is the one thing, that should matter more to you then anything else. For you see, people are more concerned in living in the here and now. While people me, we like to have a more, long game in mind. Now, don't take this as some sort of negative by any means, I am just saying, that if we want future generations to enjoy this world, then we have to be willing to protect what we love, in an effort to do our best to better our future.

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