Broken Loyalties

I really like the story, well thought out, only thing that annoyed me in the beginning was the im going to hide my power but that changes so now we good

Hi guys, for those who already read this book, this is a new copy because something happens in my last book so i hope you forgive me and continue to read this book thank you

Author needs to do more research on military service, weapons, tactics and just everything. This story seems like he watched some 90's GI Joe kids cartoon and thought that was all the research he needed.

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Man I love this story but the way you write, it's just too uptight, I mean who talk to an enemy with that level of elegance, it's like you are writing a play for opera or something, and there is that sentence that comes again and again "thrilled to explore this new world and experience everything it has to offer." this sentence is almost every chapter before c85 and sometimes it is more than one time in a chapter, and there is this sentence or line that you right in every new paragraph "there heart filled with anticipation and thriller for what to come" I mean come on man don't be so uptight. And don't try too much. The story is good and has way more potential than what you are presenting and please if possible change that uptight writing style. I hope this novel will become one of the best on the platform.

Once upon a time I was a little scared of the darkness. So grandma told me this story:

"Are you familiar with the town called Trinst, sire? That is where I and my master had once lived! I had first seen magi crafting crests there, and you looked just like one." Still excited, she paced in front of me. Her hair wildly frayed about as she waved her hands in the direction of Trinst.