BREAKER OF SEVEN DOORS

Really interesting story so far, don't want to put it down

Me encantó, desde el comienzo la historia te atrapa y te dejan con ganas de seguir leyendo.

some of the best pieces of fiction i have ever read. truly exceptional. definitely recommend.

The general plot idea of this chapter isn't too bad, though the writing quality could really use some improvements. Currently I'm waiting for the next update, and things are bound to get interesting. The development of the story is a but abrupt, and a lot of things could be tweaked to make each scene a lot more realistic, and lengthen the overall word count. The characters aren't too well introduced, and the description of the scenes lack action and impact. World backround is quite plenty though. Overall, it has potential in itself, just some extra effort.