The story is fine and all, but the writing quality is not the best.
In almost every chapter you have dialogs like this:
-"How about all of you first announce your name?" Melody said telling them to reveal their names to her.
"Alright. "
Vincent, John, Iris, Varth, Leilani, and Nevis revealed their names to the fairy, taking several seconds to do so. -
You often have a lengthy exposition to a topic, then somebody mentions it in almost the same words and then you get a reply often in the same style. So you read the same words 3 times in a row. The example above is just one without spoilers, but once you notice this pattern, it gets exhausting to read.
Also, dialogues are far too "detailed". Where a normal, short answer would be the norm and perfectly fine, here you have long answers with all the details so the conversations dont "feel" like conversations normal people would have.
I have been voting for this novel ever since its beginning. One of the best works I have ever read in my life. The first act seems bland without much human interaction but it's the making of the vampire and the introduction of the main characters. The second arc blossoms onto a lovely fit of teenage romance, the revelation of characters with cool and mysterious backgrounds, their dreams, the instructor's mysteriousness, and everything that sets this novel apart from the hundreds of thousands of others.
I know this novel gonna become popular as long as the platform actively supports the author!
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this webnovel 100% has the capability to stand side by side with the other top webnovels (for example, My Vampire System). the novel has a few grammer mistakes but that doesnt affect the meaning behind the paragraph the author is trying to express. Overall this webnovel is already in my top 10 favorites and i greatly urge new readers to give the webnovel 10 chapters before writing it off and you’ll be hooked. In all honestly, the biggest write off for most is the amount of chapters a webnovel has but if you give this one a chance, you wont regret it. Once the webnovel has a little over 200 chapters, I bet it’ll be a top webnovel as it rightfully deserves. That’s all from me.
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In almost every chapter you have dialogs like this:
-"How about all of you first announce your name?" Melody said telling them to reveal their names to her.
"Alright. "
Vincent, John, Iris, Varth, Leilani, and Nevis revealed their names to the fairy, taking several seconds to do so. -
You often have a lengthy exposition to a topic, then somebody mentions it in almost the same words and then you get a reply often in the same style. So you read the same words 3 times in a row. The example above is just one without spoilers, but once you notice this pattern, it gets exhausting to read.
Also, dialogues are far too "detailed". Where a normal, short answer would be the norm and perfectly fine, here you have long answers with all the details so the conversations dont "feel" like conversations normal people would have.
I know this novel gonna become popular as long as the platform actively supports the author!
Know this, I was here before it bec@me popular
this webnovel 100% has the capability to stand side by side with the other top webnovels (for example, My Vampire System). the novel has a few grammer mistakes but that doesnt affect the meaning behind the paragraph the author is trying to express. Overall this webnovel is already in my top 10 favorites and i greatly urge new readers to give the webnovel 10 chapters before writing it off and you’ll be hooked. In all honestly, the biggest write off for most is the amount of chapters a webnovel has but if you give this one a chance, you wont regret it. Once the webnovel has a little over 200 chapters, I bet it’ll be a top webnovel as it rightfully deserves. That’s all from me.