Blood Contract : Trapped inside the bloody Otome game

The constant mix of present tense and past tense is reallly realllllly annoying. And after reading like 4 chaps, I still don't know if you intended to write things in present tense or past tense. Other than that, there's not much to badmouth regarding grammar. As for WOrld and character design, they're very very interesting. Everything's explained in a quick, no-nonsense manner, and you can see the characters' personalities oozing out from the pages.Some passages read in a bit of an exaggerated manner to emphasize plot points and character traits, but it's nothing too overbearing.As for story dev, I rly can't say much at this point in the novel

You would think that 4.5 rating and 180 chapter would make a great story, huh? WRONG! Evry chapter doesn't have more than 500 words without the status,skill and quest information.What's more, the status doesn't make any sense.

"Stop, Lingling. Let's not talk about that right now. Liancai, I wan't to break up-.. break up with you because I'm falling for Lingling. When you have been very busy, she was there for me. She was just like me, we were waiting for you to glance at us, and just glances while you were busy building your dream. I was very in love with you at the beginning, because I saw you were hopeful, like me. I saw myself in you. Somewhere along the way, you started to change. You started to crave more. All the plans we has were pushed back. See, this restaurant, how we dreamed of eating here but how many times have you canceled our dinner here at the last minute? All those time you were busy, you were losing me." Yuan said solemnly.

Yo yo yo mengapa ini tak ada lelanjutannya ak penasaran sama neng meysa dan bang erden ih jangan di gantung dong masa udah berbulan sih gak ada kelanjutanya..... udh ak kasih bintang ples batu kuasa juga mna woy

"What are you doing here!" Ichigo shouted in a whisper.

Jack Nicholson:"Have you ever danced with the devil in the pale moon light"

"Drink this" I held out a bottle of liquid potion on my palm as I offered it to him.

I shift into a comfortable position on the soft bed, breathing a sigh of relief for my aching muscles Lulled by the lapping waves against the shore, I drift off to sleep almost immediately. It does not take long for a dream to play across my dreaming lids. I see the islands that make up Greece below me. To my left, multiple ships head to an island with heavy clouds hovering above. The first boat is struck by a might bolt of thunder, catching fire as it sinks to the depths.