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I've just read the first 40 chapters and I can only say that I'm really conflicted about this novel. On one side I'm happy to see that the novel contains a lot of things that I like but on the other side I'm very disappointed that it also has things that I absolutely hate. The biggest plus is the setting, a guy who transmigrates to a world that is just about to go into a cultivation era and the mc gets a system with the goal to teach cultivation to as many people as possible. It's an interesting setting because the goal is not to be secretive, and that would open up the possibility of seeing an mc brag to his normal friends and actually do what he brags about (eg Mc: I can fly. Friend: yeah right, do you think you're an immortal and get a sword and fly away? Mc takes out sword, levitate it in the air and jumps on it). I have never seen this before and it looks like it is possible in this novel. And there are some other things that I think have the possibility of getting interesting story lines (eg involving the elderly first, having a hot not blood related sister but no interest in a relationship, the system so far has not given out missions that would require a lot of plot armor to complete). But for all the good things there are also bad things. The 2 things that are very noticeable is the use of idiotic young masters who pull out the big guns for the slightest provocation (the 2 young masters that were seen so far both had no backstory or build up, you meet them and they discover the girl they like is involved with the mc and directly sends out people to get rid of him, and the stupid thing is both of them actually have an interesting background story where it would be easy to show some of the information without giving away the plot). And the second thing has to do with the novel title and how the author ruined the title because he wanted to make a running joke about the mc, a joke that is not funny. The title makes you think the mc tricks some elderly in cultivating immortal cultivation techniques but although the elderly are the first to agree the mc has not told the elderly any lie about cultivation. The mc is completely honest and open about what he wants to teach and nobody believes him (which is funny the first time you read it but the first time it is mentioned it is mentioned by the narrator and that he was sent to the asylum, and instead of changing tactics he keeps on using the same tactic. The second time it is no longer funny and the 5th time it becomes annoying). The elderly eventually agree because they pity the mc, and in a sense you could say he has tricked them with that but to me that is not a good enough reason. I understand the author wants to use this as a running joke but I probably would have liked it better if the mc actually tricked the elderly to do some 'Chinese Yoga' which is actually cultivation, looking at the starting exercise that was used that could have easily been adapted to fit that narrative. If he used the Chinese Yoga as an excuse he could have even had a natural way to move from elderly to younger people but that chance was lost because of a stupid repeating joke that becomes more and more annoying with each time you see it
The book is well structured based on the author and easy going. I love this book, can't wait for new chapters. All the characters are well designed and constructed. However if I had to offer feedback. Is that the story introducing character and completely disregards them. Maybe keep them for longer so we can understand the world
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