Well, I was skeptical about its 4.8 rating at the starting. But after reading all the chapters up to 126 , I feel it deserves this rating. Hell I have also given it a 4.8 rating. This novel has a lot of potential. Author is doing quite good. I like this types of novels.
I like the story, the plots not really unique but its entertaining to read.
My one issue with this novel is, well, the romance aspect of it. I don't care if the MC is deranged or a lunatic, however it doesn't make any sense why its in the plot.
Where exactly does MC even find time for a romance is the grand scheme of things?!?!?
It's so unrealistic and contradictory to how you established character... how exactly does romance fit into a novel where the protag is motivated by ambition to overcome the laws of the world in the novel?
He wants powers, he actively strives for it and disregards the life of others like insects to achieve what he wants.... and now your trying to make me believe he can suddenly love after all that he's done and willing to do?
It's ridiculous. You don't establish the essence of your character as ruthless and power hungry, devoid of feeling and morality, only seeking power, to add in a romance in the middle of the novel....
You might ask why you shouldn't do this? Easy! Because someone willing to do anything for power would NEVER LOVE ANYONE that would become a HUGE weakness.
It contradicts your plot and established MC's sense of self/motivations/goals that the author wrote HIMSELF.
You could see from the earlier chapters of this novel that the author kept trying to find ways to make a romance happen, inserting the obvious FL every chance he got and it only got worse, especially at around chapter(s) 592+ onwards.
It would have been all great except how the MC progressed many many chapters earlier. We know that he's a psychopath, and he lacks any feelings. By the time the romance (AKA lovesick desperate author wants some MEOWWW) comes in, its not only unbelievable, it's an insult to readers intelligence and time spent reading.
Not bad, but there were several things that I didn’t like such as the psychological development of the MC that was quite poorly executed, but still the world development was really good.
Like it so far! Good writing (English isn't my main langage thought, so I might not be good enough to see all the possible mistakes ^^), good update flow. For the story itself, the world is consistent and it is not that often that I saw authors using the three main dantian and not just one. Mixing magic and martial arts by that mean is not use often too. It seems like the author as put some thoughts in it to explain the process and not just saying "magic exists because it does...". Even thought the MC seems locked on one mindset, I like the fact that he is ruthless and don't care about moral bullsh*t or doesn't force logic to achieve his goals. He is quit straightforward, realistic and honest with himself. I wouldn't say he is a vilain, it's more like he does what's need to be done to survive while getting stronger. There is no Harem and smut cr*p so far, that's a good point too! I don't think the novel and the MC need romance either. Even if some characters are obviously here just to allow the MC to get some benefits he needs for the sake of making progresses in the story (the hunters or the unorthodox cultivators), it doesn't affect the reading that much IMO.
Typical kid mc that is extremely arrogant and unlikeable, nothing new. It started of well with the mc background but slowly devolved into the mc being arrogant once br started to get stronger. Killing people constantly with no regards. Had potential but unfortunately bad mc development killed the story for me.
It's almost perfect cultivation novel. Really. You can't find anything better. MC is intelligent, strong but not OP. Pacing is good. The only bad thing is that every time i read it i feel like some drug addict, wanting more and more.
I have been reading this story from the very beginning. I wasn't too keen on it at first, but the writing became better and I started to enjoy it immensely. Keep up the great work Eve. I truly admire your talent.
As the name suggests.. the book is about a cold and calclulative characters rise to power. While he doesn't go out of his way to commit evil.. he is known to be brutal towards anyone who tries to harm him.
Its a refreshing character build that seems more in tune with reality. Highly recommend.
1) I absolutely love your story and you have my addiction burning.
2) The only real constructive feedback that I have for you is that when you realise you are using some words too many times (ex. Recomposing or ingress) that you use the thesaurus to give you more options to expand your vocabulary.
3) Last thing, try to utilize words that aren't a mouthful for people to read. Using a softer approach for the sentence "his ingress to the royal capital was a grand spectical to witness." could be changed to "his entrence to the royal capital was a grand sight to see." Those are just some general statements I made up, but the second sentence is far easier for people to read vice the former.
4) Again I love your story and your use of some interesting vocabulary and these are just some suggestions that could help amplify your writing.
Ngl, it was good for first hundread's of chapter's but it gets really bad, the Novel is full off thing's which doesn't need to be explained, he makes a love intrest( which is like way younger then her, if you count his real age) and later he has s*x with a random sl*t, then he find's another women which is actually lovable and smashes but circumstances forced them to depart and he basically doesn't show up for a 100 years just because he didn't had " Power", he literally let's his father figure die because he just can't be more fuc*ng thoughtful in his infiltration, he let's his master die because he thought of him as "burden"
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My one issue with this novel is, well, the romance aspect of it. I don't care if the MC is deranged or a lunatic, however it doesn't make any sense why its in the plot.
Where exactly does MC even find time for a romance is the grand scheme of things?!?!?
It's so unrealistic and contradictory to how you established character... how exactly does romance fit into a novel where the protag is motivated by ambition to overcome the laws of the world in the novel?
He wants powers, he actively strives for it and disregards the life of others like insects to achieve what he wants.... and now your trying to make me believe he can suddenly love after all that he's done and willing to do?
It's ridiculous. You don't establish the essence of your character as ruthless and power hungry, devoid of feeling and morality, only seeking power, to add in a romance in the middle of the novel....
You might ask why you shouldn't do this? Easy! Because someone willing to do anything for power would NEVER LOVE ANYONE that would become a HUGE weakness.
It contradicts your plot and established MC's sense of self/motivations/goals that the author wrote HIMSELF.
You could see from the earlier chapters of this novel that the author kept trying to find ways to make a romance happen, inserting the obvious FL every chance he got and it only got worse, especially at around chapter(s) 592+ onwards.
It would have been all great except how the MC progressed many many chapters earlier. We know that he's a psychopath, and he lacks any feelings. By the time the romance (AKA lovesick desperate author wants some MEOWWW) comes in, its not only unbelievable, it's an insult to readers intelligence and time spent reading.
Its a refreshing character build that seems more in tune with reality. Highly recommend.
2) The only real constructive feedback that I have for you is that when you realise you are using some words too many times (ex. Recomposing or ingress) that you use the thesaurus to give you more options to expand your vocabulary.
3) Last thing, try to utilize words that aren't a mouthful for people to read. Using a softer approach for the sentence "his ingress to the royal capital was a grand spectical to witness." could be changed to "his entrence to the royal capital was a grand sight to see." Those are just some general statements I made up, but the second sentence is far easier for people to read vice the former.
4) Again I love your story and your use of some interesting vocabulary and these are just some suggestions that could help amplify your writing.
THANK YOU AND I HOPE YOU GIVE THIS A READ OVER :D
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