In my opinion, only problem in your novel is that it is very slow . if you solve this problem, then this story has very high potential . You should also focus more on Worldbuilding too .
It's good but I'm gon drop it, cuz it's too slow paced, and I don't have the patience to read it. Even if the pace will pick up, I don't want to wait...so yeah.
But give it a try if you want.
Its a pretty good book its a lot like The bloodline system, however the MC isn't instantly over powered and doesn't revolve around space and space travel. This story has a nice pace to it is written well. The people around MC are not just empty NPCs they feel like people as well which isn't that easy. Anyway keep up the good work look forward to reading more.
the MC is pretty dense and nieve, but his background and age kind of explain this. feels like a flawed person who doesn't always make the right choices, not like the author had him make dumb decisions for the plot. the story overall is pretty good and original. The pacing just seems off, I think it may be due to how much the MCs travel is detailed or details about background characters when it's not clear if they are important to the story.
This novel is absolutely incredible and unique, unlike anything I have read before. The best part is that the novel just continues to get better and better as the story goes on. The author has taken the genres of the system, apocalypse, supernatural/ sci-fi, and the concepts of superpowers, AI, and advanced tech, and was able to blend them together creating his own unique take that is awesome to read. I recommend this novel to everyone
Writing quality: Top notch. Few if any errors that pull you out of the story.
Story Development: Absolutely splendid read, you have a bullied kid, parental problems, PTSD/trauma, then coming across a "Opportunity" this leads to its own set of problems but incredible potential positives outcomes. To a solid bit of foreshadowing of something major occuring in the story early on and gradually picking up into a grand finale of sorts. Can't imagine what we will be getting to experience in this story few hundred chapters from now.
Character Design: Solid work here across the board. Consistently expressing other characters and how the occurrences in the story in itself effected them. Showing growth in the main character early on and being consistent with it. Main character isn't broken op and still has enemies but clearly you can see what his growth rate will be like in the future.
Updating stability: I want to see 14 chapters a week. I personally read extremely fast. So I'm generally picky here. And I like basically being able to get on every day and getting to read a solid 2 chapters from Novels I am really enjoying. Meh I'm needy/greedy when it comes to good literature can't help it. I just read most of the chapters in burst and caught up to the most recent chapter so I can't judge on this and so forth leaving it at 5 stars until further notice.
World Background: Overall solid, the author gives good description of environments that the "present" story is taking place in from schools, training areas, bedrooms and more and has also included this in combat scenes in the use of weapons or defenses. The story has gone over some history but it's been here and there for me, this is probably not what most people will think, it's just what I personally would prefer a bit more in this one specific aspect. Can't help it I'm needy. More I have to read of this the better.
Total: 5 out of 5 in each category until further notice. It's definitely caught my eye and I'm now paying attention to it's uploads. Very enjoyable read that makes me want more. To see what's coming next.
Final Verdict will be given when the author reaches 1,000 chapters or the novel is otherwise abandoned.
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But give it a try if you want.
Story Development: Absolutely splendid read, you have a bullied kid, parental problems, PTSD/trauma, then coming across a "Opportunity" this leads to its own set of problems but incredible potential positives outcomes. To a solid bit of foreshadowing of something major occuring in the story early on and gradually picking up into a grand finale of sorts. Can't imagine what we will be getting to experience in this story few hundred chapters from now.
Character Design: Solid work here across the board. Consistently expressing other characters and how the occurrences in the story in itself effected them. Showing growth in the main character early on and being consistent with it. Main character isn't broken op and still has enemies but clearly you can see what his growth rate will be like in the future.
Updating stability: I want to see 14 chapters a week. I personally read extremely fast. So I'm generally picky here. And I like basically being able to get on every day and getting to read a solid 2 chapters from Novels I am really enjoying. Meh I'm needy/greedy when it comes to good literature can't help it. I just read most of the chapters in burst and caught up to the most recent chapter so I can't judge on this and so forth leaving it at 5 stars until further notice.
World Background: Overall solid, the author gives good description of environments that the "present" story is taking place in from schools, training areas, bedrooms and more and has also included this in combat scenes in the use of weapons or defenses. The story has gone over some history but it's been here and there for me, this is probably not what most people will think, it's just what I personally would prefer a bit more in this one specific aspect. Can't help it I'm needy. More I have to read of this the better.
Total: 5 out of 5 in each category until further notice. It's definitely caught my eye and I'm now paying attention to it's uploads. Very enjoyable read that makes me want more. To see what's coming next.
Final Verdict will be given when the author reaches 1,000 chapters or the novel is otherwise abandoned.