Being Reincarnated with my Beast King System

Its an interesting story with a good backround. the character is hardworking and while he is given most things free he does still put in the effort to survive in a dangerous environement

So far the plot and pace are pretty good, I hope the story isn't rushed like in the old novel. If possible, make the MC's relationship with the current woman deeper first, before bringing up a new harem member.

Cant understand crap the dang thing is machine translated or something. I gived up trying to read this in the 2nd chapter. The MC's is pretty much generic guy who goes on the path of power for the generic reason of saving his life. I dont hate it and would have read it through but the grammer kills it for me.

plz tell me if it is available on other sites i really want to read but don't have any  coins left..........................................

NOTE THIS REVIEW DOES NOT STATE THE ACTUAL RATING AS IM NOT UPDATING IT AGAIN*This was a contructive feedback review to improve the authors writing and book, it will likely be different than what is stated if the author has fixed things*You need to read over your chapters more before u publish them. You are missing a lot of places where commas should be. There are lot of places where there are pauses, but it keeps going.Ex) C1 there was "but I call it home which" Should be a comma before which as it pauses when u speak it out loud. Try to speak in your mind or quietly as u check for edits.You also need to put space (enters) before new thoughts as sometimes it is not put.Ex) C2 first page the character put a thought. As this is a novel, you should enter a space after that sentance you put as it is a new thought, meaning new paragraph. If you must put stuff before thoughts or phrases use commas to connect the sentence and sperate setences, as it will usually create a new thought.Make your sentences smaller, from C2 onwards, some of the paragraphs were one block of sentance creating like 7-10 lines on my phone. If you must use them, do it only like once a chapter as readers do not like reading them.I have no idea what The Grudge is and Im sure others have theproblem too. I would do [1] after and explain it later in the author notes.I only read 5 chapters in so didnt complete it but the review has enough by now. Make sure to add more of the 5 senses you are writing first person, its suffering isekai effect where everything is becoming too 2D. This is why a lot of popular books are third person, hard to write first person for long stories.Also MC's reactions aren't realistic enough. Describe what hes feeling more and add stuff into his speaking like when he screamed, for example "St-Stop!! Please!..."Make paragraphs shorter and make sure to add commas. Would try to add some more emotions too in your old chaps before you get too far into it. Make it more realistic too, MC wouldn't think about why he is not noticng the spageti when a perfectly normal citizen is being kidnapped in a dark alley way.Also last one is just preference but I think you should change Ewan's name. It sounds like it was too forced to make up a fantasy name, or at least explain where it originates from. Lastly try to read past comments once in a while, you don't want to leave your fans/readers nothing when they ask questions or something.You should also explain the college a bit more as most dorms will make u sign a contract or agreement, the couple wouldve been kicked out a long time ago.Also for the chat group, you might want to make bigger plot as logically there wouldnt be one chat group as police can easily inflatrate by betrayers, maybe rephrase the words thay way it can still do the direction u want but mode plot more protected so readers wont think of things like I just did, so plot proof

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The world that the Mc KNOWS . have to change into A RPG world, read on how he do and what he do in such a worldComedy, GAME ELEMENTS , Original, semi pure hack and slash

Honest reviews are here..[Extreme Spoiler Alert]As the title wrote, it already described that MC unintentionally joined the chat group of a powerful Constellation.. What is good in this novel is that the world (also called Earth) just started to change during the MC era.. So, everyone is starting at Lv1, same as MC.. So, we won't see any individuals who are already at Lv100 or higher level on Earth.. Right now, MC is the person who has the highest level..(Noted: it is not clarified by the author yet, but so far, MC has the highest level in his city.. I'm not sure about other city awakeners or what will happen in the future.)Everyone needs Constellation to gain skills.. If you don't have Constellation, you simply won't get any skills.. So far, the novel has not reached that kind of explanation yet, so I'm not sure if it is possible for humanity to get skills without any Constellation.. The story is just beginning, so maybe we will know in the future..Constellation will make a contract with any individual they find interesting, and of course, that individual either need to pay the skills using a lot of money (the higher the skills rank, the more expensive the skills is) OR using the a request items or quest given by those Constellation..To avoid misunderstanding, the Constellation CANNOT watch their candidates or any individual action unlike another novel Constellation.. So, MC needs to share the image or video in the group chat to entertain the Constellation request.. Group chat is created by the "System." Yes, there is a system in this novel..MC is someone who joins a group chats of powerful Constellation due to system error and got 2 SSS+ class skills after communicating with Constellation in the group.. He also will get more and more SSS+ class skills later on..Constellation in the group chats:👉🏻Heaven Emperor 👉🏻Slaughter Sword Emperor 👉🏻Star Moon Emperor 👉🏻Golden Emperor 👉🏻Queen of Life 👉🏻South Sea Queen (Deep Sea Queen)👉🏻Eternal Ice Empress👉🏻Phoenix👉🏻Primordial Azure Dragon👉🏻Underworld LordSSS+ Skill:👉🏻Shadow Army [by Underworld Lord]👉🏻Sacred Flame [by Phoenix]👉🏻Water Ruler [by South Sea Queen]👉🏻Primordial Azure Dragon Bone👉🏻Star Moon Power [by Star Moon Emperor]☝🏻Interesting skills right?MC is an orphan, and his guardian is his aunt.. His aunt also got a contract with one of Constellation in that group chat after MC introduced her in the group.. Yes, his aunt knows about that group chat.. He told everything to her.. Unfortunately, his aunt still keeps some secret from MC..It kinda seems like MC is planning to create a harem.. I don't mind if there is a harem or not, BUT I really hope that his aunt is NOT in the harem..Before Ch60, the novel is going thru a good pacing with a nice introductory phase and momentum.. But unfortunately, after Ch60, everything changed.. There are WAYS too many "flirting" scenes.. So much to the point that even other readers start to get bored..Every chapter will start with some action scene by the MC and end with a flirting scene.. Yes, this pattern seems to be fixed.. I kinda wish that the author would stop these boring patterns and didn't use this flirting scene to delay the story.. But, if the author really doesn't have any new idea, at the very least, just reduce those flirting scenes.. That way, your novel will sure get better.. Btw, this is just an opinion from ur fan..To be honest, I'm not a fan of "sharing" power, but I keep reading it because the story is getting interesting (I'm mean the action scenes, I'm NOT included those flirting scenes) and I want to see how far MC can go.. Plus, MC is an OP character, and I'm an OP fan.. I also love that the author didn't nerf MC in any way.. So, I keep reading it..Even though there are only 79 chapters (for non-privilege), this novel is probably going to be my top20 on my list in the future ( I can't be sure yet due to this novel just start).. Plus, with fast updates so far, it kinda makes others reader happy and satisfied.. I hope this fast update will last until the end..