Usually,I am not a fan of system novels, but this book has sparked my curiosity and I ended up reading. It was totally worth it!!! The plot itself appears promising and the characters are well written. The story develops through the main protagonist, Zach.. Instead dumping every information all at once.The story literally gives light to the journey of Zack to an orphan through a great warrior. Author have a pretty good command over the language and explains the story in simple terms, (which I haven't seen on other system novels)
Kudos to the author, keep up the good work 👍👍👍
This sure reminds me of sci-fi movies I have seen in the past. With a mix of martial arts in it, then I am hooked! After reading ten chaps, I must say the chapters were short. But they were enjoyable indeed! I think it was still not its best version and I can see that it has still some parts of improvements. I praise the author's creativity and imagination, as it was hard to think of your own unique world in the first place. Kudos! You are very talented and don't stop writing. Master your own writing style and discover it yourself in the future. I am rooting for you [img=recommend]
This book has the potential and it was worth my time reading it. The grammars are ok, some mistakes here and there but it doesn't matter, at least I could convey what they meant
Very descriptive nice storytelling and over whole the background is lovely, this is a great fantasy sci fi vibe. The world-building and the plot has been carefully put effort into and well thought out and just the whole novel is a great start and this is a good novel for anyone who into these type of novel
The power system alone was already enough to hook me. But then again this novel has all the things I look for in a novel. The chapters that I've read are also very interesting.
I greatly admire this author's creativity. The writer's intentions are clear and the novel has a solid plot. The plot is common in anime and comics but the writer managed to make it very interesting.
However, the story is greatly flawed and plagued by errors from all aspects of English. Grammar, punctuation and capitalization could use some serious work.
Majority of the sentences and names started with common letters and words that were supposed to start with common letters started with capital letters. Person's names, names of places and sentences should begin with capital letters.
The sentences were poorly structured and most of them were run-on sentences. Punctuation marks, especially the comma was misused and end marks were not used at the end of some sentences.When they were used, they were used incorrectly. For example, some questions ended with full stop.
The dialogue in the novel seems a bit too artificial, there were no emotion behind the words and the conversations just didn't come across as realistic.
The story flowed but it was very confusing. The author went from thing to another messily without proper transitions. The wording of some sentences made things even more confusing. It was as if some sentences were missing some words or had the wrong words.
I recommend that the author use Grammarly or Proofreader when writing to get rid of most of the errors.
Overall, the novel has a lot of potential and the author has a very active imagination. The errors are the only draw back since the plot is pretty solid. I hope the author can only get better as they write. [img=recommend]
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Kudos to the author, keep up the good work 👍👍👍
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However, the story is greatly flawed and plagued by errors from all aspects of English. Grammar, punctuation and capitalization could use some serious work.
Majority of the sentences and names started with common letters and words that were supposed to start with common letters started with capital letters. Person's names, names of places and sentences should begin with capital letters.
The sentences were poorly structured and most of them were run-on sentences. Punctuation marks, especially the comma was misused and end marks were not used at the end of some sentences.When they were used, they were used incorrectly. For example, some questions ended with full stop.
The dialogue in the novel seems a bit too artificial, there were no emotion behind the words and the conversations just didn't come across as realistic.
The story flowed but it was very confusing. The author went from thing to another messily without proper transitions. The wording of some sentences made things even more confusing. It was as if some sentences were missing some words or had the wrong words.
I recommend that the author use Grammarly or Proofreader when writing to get rid of most of the errors.
Overall, the novel has a lot of potential and the author has a very active imagination. The errors are the only draw back since the plot is pretty solid. I hope the author can only get better as they write. [img=recommend]