it's a good story idea and the cheat the mc has is cool but that's all I have. the mc is an idiot and acts like he is 10 he is supposed to be a super genius accepted to MIT at 15 but he is an idiot and has no maturity at all. the people around him coddle him and treat him like he is 10 also. I mean he totally fabricated base and a water/sewer system from nothing and then builds a vehicle from scratch and has killed people but they still talk to him like hes a toddler and he takes it. I really cant get into the aunt and the freak women because that whole thing is terrible.. the dialogue is terrible and needs and editor in the worst way. the best chapter of the story was the first one and then it went to crap.
The MC is an idiot,thought he would be smarter but apparently not. The grammar is pretty bad and it doesnt get any better with each chapter. I dont think this is a good story.
Writing quality is alright but needs an editor to make scenes transition better. Most of the time you don't realize a time skip has happened or where everyone is.
Story development is okay. Nothing to write home about but it's tiresome to keep seeing every man with powers turn into a *** maniac.
Character design is utter shit. The mc is a child prodigy yet does the most reckless things despite having an army behind him. Dude has been in too many life threatening situations that are due to his utter recklessness/stupidity.
Updating stability is ok.
World background is good.
All in all I would read this if a decent editor reigned in the bad and spaced out the story. As it is now, it is bad.
love the story! could use a bit of editing on the first few chapters but the rest is amazing! look forward to more. im a huge fan of magic technology combo stories! Especially since they are rather rare.
Listen if you want your story to ebcome better you have to fix it yourself and read everyone’s comment. I might sugar coat this, but many people would not and have no reason to because you chose to put this novel up unless you figure out how it fails it will keep failing. just a comment hope you can understand
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Story development is okay. Nothing to write home about but it's tiresome to keep seeing every man with powers turn into a *** maniac.
Character design is utter shit. The mc is a child prodigy yet does the most reckless things despite having an army behind him. Dude has been in too many life threatening situations that are due to his utter recklessness/stupidity.
Updating stability is ok.
World background is good.
All in all I would read this if a decent editor reigned in the bad and spaced out the story. As it is now, it is bad.