MC's stupidity is so bothering I don't know how he is a successful businessman on earth. Maybe they shouldn't say that he is a successful businessman in the first place because of how stupid he is. I also skip chapters because his stupidity makes me uncomfortable. there are so many ways to make the story funny but not in stupid ways. once, twice stupid moves are alright but every chapter is like a "No, No" I'm in chapter 35 now I will update my review if there's an improvement.
Why is this removed in the Trial Read Section?!?!? I hope that this would return.Anyways, although the first chapters is repetitive, it explains the world he transported in while slowly making the main character a character(he now has a personali-insectality). It seems like he is the only one who has a system, but everyone and everything could evolve. Very little are known about the world's history yet but we do know that there are Gods, Magics and Demons. WHY DID I FORGET THE EVOLUTIONNNNN. A 5 out of 5.
'Transported to another world' a phrase you're all too familiar with.Such a story is usually followed with a lackluster plot, weak characters, and frequent exposition dumps that are supposed to be world building.But stick with this one. It could easily become a published book series. I would recommend this wholeheartedly to people who love detail and explanations.A genius is thrown into a feudal world with witches. So he begins an industrial revolution in a small mining town and attempts to save witches from discrimination in a backwards society.Boring extra:The story is intriguing and develops at a meticulous pace. The world is built slowly and emphasizes locations well, attaching events to certain places and giving them a character of there own (king's city and its underground, Port of Clearwater's pirate paradise, the tribes of Ironsand city). That being said the story position (the relation of locations to each other) sometimes confuses the reader. The description is just shy of a complete picture in your mind, making it necessary to glance at a map to gain the whole picture.The character design is splendid. Personalities are well displayed and developed; however, the descriptions of characters are few and far between. Apart from hair, rarely does the author delve into detail of a character. The lack of descriptions makes it hard to tell characters apart in your head, harmful thing to such a brilliant story.Overall, if you read 40 chapters then you're forever hooked.
I'm a fan of mystery, so this was my cup of tea. I love how the characters are described and detailed. I've seen some grammatical errors and I was confused at some times due to it, but I was still able to understand what was going on. I hope this story garners the attention it deserves, great job author!
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This is unfortunate. I enjoy the premise and overall concept of this story. The problem is that this story could be about an MC that has no special power or immortal life and nothing would change. The fact the MC does not age has no bearing on anything in this story. It has never come into effect at all. The only thing it does is let the mc think about how they are safe from time and that's it. Even though he is never in danger of time in the first place. The MC is scared and that's understandable I like a vigilant MC. What I hate though is an MC who has no feelings and has the power to help those around them with little to no effect on them and doesn't. It bothers me a lot. I have read 350+ chapters and the MC repeatedly does this.
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