The Bride

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Kid who was kidnapped at 3 years old, held in terrorist organization hideout and trained brutally for 6 years. Being beaten, forced to train, being brainwashed to be a mindless killer, being thrown into a room with all other kids and told 'last one to survive is free to go' and ends up being the last man standing. After all of this, SWAT raids the hideout and he gets rescued, not only does he have NO trauma, he acts like a grownup while talking with others, he trusts some random man to adopt him, agrees, goes home with the man and after 2 weeks of being there he GETS A FRIEND who is his age. How would a kid with past like that be able to trust anyone, not to mention make a friend? And to top it off, the 'friend' who is martal arts genius, who trained a lot, but only sparred, never had to fight for his life, somehow manages to fight the MC to a tie in a duel? The character design is very, very bad. His background is a massive plothole. No idea why the author would introduce a background like that, only to make the MC 'normal'.

Early in the development yet much better then 99,9% of the novels in here. Would recommend to anyone who likes the related tags of ‘game world’, ‘adventure’ and the others. Characters are individuals and not lifeless bag of filling. Writing quality is great and the story is far from the cliches past the first two chapters.

I quIte literally have no idea what is hallenijg with the character or the story. The author seems fixated on makijg the characTer some sorT of edgelord god with his personality and Making gIrls around him fAll in love With him for such little reaSons

I couldn’t read more than the first sentence... the english is really terrible... I don’t read very well english(because i ´m french) and i am quit tolerent with novel english quality but this one is... bad...  It need editing like seriously :(

The story is quite enticing and the concept is superb as well. The author has a good grasp of the English language and clearly has a strong grammatical power. As the author continues to progress I can tell that this novel will become a hit my only complain is the paragraphing issue but that will be solved in a jiffy. Give the book a read its quite interesting.

Good writing! Well thought out, but was a bit confused on the setting in the first ten chapters, was really confused on the multiple POV.First novel I read where you get the POV of a system. Overall would rate 3.8, but I round it up. To 4Keep it up author!

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