Roll-Land System: Release That Rock!

Hi everyone.  First time Author here so please bear with me.The action in this story doesn't start until around 45 chapters, your criticisms are more than welcome as they'll help me improve. Thank you.

Interesting book written in first person POV. There's a good build up moment which indicates good story telling. The plot may look common at the start but it's got its own uniqueness as you continue to read. Few adjustments, grammar, punctuations and spelling. Fairly technical but can easily be fixed. Recommended to those who like cool and collected MC.

Great work author finally a good lion story but I wish the storyline isn't so complicated so soon with the challenging pride leader stuff , I think the kael should have some level of power first before any face off ofcourse that's just my thinking it's still a great story.Pls 🥺🙏 let the update be stable and fast.

love the book and couples characters with their fushion

["Furthermore all communication and firearms has been halted. Suggesting host grab some tools as weapon to enhance your survival rates."]

[You have snatched a red packet! You obtained 1x Mystical Pen: A pen used by the Mystic Lord. You can use the pen to write a technique or draw a picture with Qi added to it. It has been stored in your storage. Would you like to retrieve?]

Thanks for the chapter.(I was just thinking, but why do we always say “thanks for the chapter” so generically? Why don’t we say “ thanks for putting a nice looking L by that corner in this sentence?)

She watches the 3 people fighting the bear and thinks: