Reborn in a Harry Potter Universe

Blake chuckled and held Blake's hands in his hand and kissed him deeply.

🤔I like the concept of dual cultivation, and how strong Xiao Feng is. The writing quality is relatively good, and not something you expect from a first timer🤔My problem lies with how short the chapters are, and the subtitle that appear during chapters, it ruins the spoiler factor, idk, maybe it's me.

Generally speaking, a better grasp on English vocabulary and speech would make a good addition to the dialogue writing. The characters have good descriptions and the world building is on point with the plot progression but I feel that the narrative itself could use a little nudge based on the actions the characters are taking. Also, the advice you may have read about 'Show - not - Tell' has better interpretations. Show the actions from the perspective/ thoughts of the character in action rather than telling a description of the situation in which the actions are taking place, there is no fault in the descriptions but a central/dedicated theme allows for more instruments to join the music. Ciao!