RWBY the Session

Alrighty, this is probably my first real review I have even written, mostly because I like my bloopy persona. However, this book is just so close to being something amazing while being written by an author who is very good, so I feel the need to give my honest critique on how to make this story go from a good story to a phenomenal story.So, lets start with some things that I notice are being doing very well. The character personalities are very distinct, at least from what I can tell. Most new authors have the issue of letting their own personality leek into the characters they write, making all have similar ticks and whatnot. This author, however, has done a good job so far of keeping the characters being themselves. This is great, but what is no so great is how the author has developed the personality (well, specifically the mc since none of the other characters have existed to the readers long enough to develop). You can think of a story like a road trip, where you are trying to go from the beginning of the story to the end, where there is hills and valleys (conflicts and resolutions), and of course the occasional pitstop (info dumps, really anything that interrupts the flow of the story), which causes the car of the reader to come to a complete stop. These pitstops are where the problem in this book lie, there are way too many of them. Every time the mc has even a little bit of character development, the entire story pauses and stretches the moment out. Try to make it so that a non-groundbreaking oh-my-gosh-the-world-is-going-to-end type events limited to only a couple of paragraphs, it will help keep the metaphorical roadtrip a lot less choppier.Another thing this author has done pretty darn good is the reasoning. There is always a why to everything that is done that is logical and pretty easy for most readers to readily accept, which is a lot harder then it may sound. Except, there needs to be a balance in how you expain this, it is completely understandable if sometimes there just needs to be an info dump, or something the mc explains in his/her head for the reader’s sake. However, using the same method over and over become repeatitive and boring, and will lead to readers skipping past parts because they feel they have already seen it before. A pretty simple way to fix this would be use a similar idea to crop rotation, where you use a couple different ways of explaining the whys behind things, and just rotate them in such a way the same way of explaining things is never within ~5-8 chapters of eachother.I really feel that if you can fix these 2 things, author, this book can have a much higher quality standard and attract a lot more attention. Thank you for all the hard work you put into writing a book and hope you have a great day, whoever reads this :)Also bloop.

On the verge of creaming myself knowing the protagonist is a monster! This is a rare occurrence that only blesses us mortals once every heavenly rotation! Praise be the people who picked this!P.S: Curse the Daoist above me who claimed first review

Its really rare to find good stuff in between the 95% of trash on this site, so im happy to proclaim this Novel a gem in the making. Sadly only 14 Chapters are out so far ... but hey, keep up the great work Author!

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Path to victory is invading other fictions.  .....................................

This story is one of the best I have seen it is great with characters and tell the real sorry for me is one of the best

This story revolves around an 'NPC' that holds a hidden identity of being a reincarnator from earth. He is summoned into a territory and slowly increases his strength by farming and chopping trees. The MC is not overly empathetic nor is he cruel, he's just one of those protagonists that have an OP near impossibly durable personality. The story has a relatively slow pace as it describes almost every aspect of the Mc's life from taking a dump to eating a pear. Don't read this story if your counting on character depth though as the only character with any real depth is the MC. Even most of the beasts in this story have a more "real" personality than the other NPCs.

With much enthusiasm and avidity, the author presents us with an engaging story. The storyline, as well as the presentation and design of the characters throughout the story,  continue to be appealing and winsome. Sadly, I do have to add that there are a lot of mistakes concerning grammar and vocabulary - and that’s alright, everyone makes them - yet I believe it would be a pity since this work has some potential. It simply needs to be polished into the gem it might be. I truly believe that this work could profit from an experienced and/or skilled editor so that it might develop into more.Overall, I find it to be a relaxing and engaging read, very suited for this platform. I wish you a lot of fun continuing your story.