This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter 11.I usually don't dabble in fan-fic, and for that reason what I feel might be non-standard could be perfectly normal in this specific setting. Bear that in mind whenever you read something negative I have to say.The little there is of the story reads like some 1950 style of private eye film noir, complete with voice over and everything. The setting, however, is very much today -- today in a world with demons roaming the world as cannon fodder.At chapter eleven there's already a hefty body count, but nothing much has happened. We're following a male lead who kills demons and a female one who feels bad.The writing style follows one of the worst cases of non-standard information lay-out I have ever seen, but the author is explicitly clear that this is deliberate already in the synopsis. As a reader you simply don't have the right to be negatively surprised, but you can, as I did, note that it just doesn't work for you.Dialogue reads like a script, but the feeling of talking heads remain nonetheless. There are also a few occurences where exposition and reflections get mixed up, but overall the author is very disciplined when it comes to following the created rules for information delivery.Run on sentences detract from the reading experience even if you buy into the layout of the story.So for the stars.Writing: Four stars. This is an aggregate of a five star English used and a three star visual narrative. If you accept the way the story is delivered then this is a rock solid five stars.Updates: Five stars. No discussion.Story: Five stars. I personally would prefer to give it three, but I'm simply not familiar with the story/game that this work is a derivate of. Maybe it's supposed to be like this. For that reason I choose not to bash the narrative and give it the full five stars.Character: Four stars. There's a torrent of dialogue, and there are archetypes aplenty. There is, however, very little insight into the characters. I could have shaken my head and given it five stars anyway, but I want to understand my characters. Observe that the understanding might be implicit, given that this is a fan-fic after all, but I still want to feel the characters even if I'm supposed to be familiar with them from the original works.World. Four stars. I'm applying the exact same reasoning as for character above. There is world, but not enough. I'm aware it might be an implicit understanding, even an unwritten contract between writer and reader, that I'm supposed to be familiar with it. For me that's not a good enough excuse to skimp on it.Lastly I want to remind you I'm reviewing a style of story I'm entirely unfamiliar with. My words here reflect the experience I carry with me from reading other stories.
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"Oh." Even the reporter who asked the question was dumbstruck. They expected it since it has just been two weeks since the talk show of Chiu Haoji has been aired but when it came out from Li Zuo Jin, it still shook his entire being.
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