BTTH in a nutshell: Here's a girl, there's another girl, MC nearly died here whew, here have another girl, power up, oh no girl A went back to her clan, power up, another girl please, the girl from before that disappeared returned, oh that girl almost died, filler chapters, power up again, girl hates MC but doesn't kill MC even though she wants to, another girl, more pretty girls, girls.I love this novel. A competent MC that isn't hung up on "justice
THIS IS A CONSTRUCTIVE FEEDBACK REVIEW AND DOES NOT PROBABLY RELATE TO THE CURRENT NOVEL'S TRUE RATINGThe novel was surprisingly good. If I were to say anything, you just need to reread your chapters more and put in commas at certain places. Only typo I noticed was you put ,., somewhere at the start I think. Noticed you aren't putting in commas before ands and buts a lot.Also for the story, its not realistic how he found the cube at that place. Countless people visit there every year, how was he the first to find and pick it up after (assuming its from ancient Greece) centuries have passed?Also I would change up your start. Its not interesting for readers to read flasbacks at the start of a book. This is why whe there are flash backs, its always way farther into the book or movie if its poplar.You should also consider a Prologue. This is how you grab people's attention, and interest. This is how they survive the first few chapters. I myself was not interested at the start, but I kept reading.Now I noticed two big plotholes of your story. One is he put countless death marks, but when you jumped into levels, he barely died that much, also he only marked at the start. Then its as if his flashback persnality disapeared and his whole personality changed. As I've read a lot of books and I am also an author, I can guess that the flashback isbfor way farther into the book, but guarantee 99% didnt think that much and just ignored it or thought the book was stupid and left.Second one are the stats, you made stat points really low, but whe MC gained stats rivaling the police officers, he was more macho and studd compared to them? Even more than that scrawny asian guy you said? Also try to describe emotions and five senses more, was bit bland reading. Try to describe things more, and add more relatable thing so its not 2D.Lastly I marked 3 for updates as long hiatus. I would've done two, but looking at your past record and past two days, nearly updated every day so bumped it up to 3. It would've hit four or above if not for that.
I usually don’t make reviews but felt that I had to after reading this book. It’s still pretty new since it only has around 30 chapters, but it already got me hooked after reading the first chapter. The two main characters are refreshing and the chemistry between them is really good. The writing quality is one of the best on this site and from what I read so far this story will become even better as it progresses. I honestly feel that as long as the author doesn’t magically become worse at writing this can become one of the top novels on this site.
It took a bit, but eventually I mustered the strength to sit up and wipe the tears from my face. I opened the food, it was a warm chicken pot pie. I tried to eat it, but I was so depressed that half of it just fell from my mouth as I chewed. It felt as though there was nothing I could do.
Inna saw him coming but she didn't have enough energy and motivation on her to fight him so she just remained on the floor, staring as he quickly approached her.
'Probably off to some business, better take the chance and might as well rob some food.....now we are at it so far' she thought as she continued staring at that one particular fruit.
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