the blurb needs more context if you want to attract more readers. another paragraph would do if you want to keep it mysterious.
the narration has a melancholic tone to it.
tense consistency is an issue, as well as the grammar. but with some editing, this will be even better. nice work
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the narration has a melancholic tone to it.
tense consistency is an issue, as well as the grammar. but with some editing, this will be even better. nice work