it's doesn't matter actually, GT or QI, as long as i can read it. Dont thing too much will you, just enjoy it........................................................................................................ :D
This novel remembers me the author One, who wrote One punch man and mob psyco. Is in it own way fast and awesome. I feel it is realy intetesting even if the story is measy, or even senseless sometimes. Author keep on, I like this novel a lot. Walter.
I just finished reading your first chapter. I must say you put a lot of work in it and it's creative. However, it's a lot of exposition in the first Chapter.All the backstory, worldbuilding... You know. Every Information that's not conveyed by Dialogue or Action.The other scenes beside the Exposition are good though.Keep as much Information as possible hidden from the audienceThey are smart, and will figure it outYou have a great Set up. Try to show a little bit of scene of mc getting bashed up in his date or something. I'm not a date expert. So, I can't tell you this in detail. Only can give an idea of what should be written first. If you show such scenes where mc feel very low and sad, although he put a lot of effort in this date, it would give a proper way to convey emotions of the mc in a dialogue or actions.Also, show only what is necessary for the character to know, not for the audience. Like the god of creation and God of void info.It's too much for me to process this much info right at the beginning and I'm sure it is same for other readersAdditionally, it makes it reasonable to tell our mc and the the audience patiently, the Info that's very basic for anyone to know.It is currently all internal, I think that's hard to convey without any external reflection. Like, talking with someone else about it, or showing the emotional change through action can get a better effect.If you just tell what happened, it also takes a little bit away from the Reader finding out about it. You know...Now, I am not an expert though...I've seen many novels doing the same thing at first. some get popular while some doesn't. It depends.So, it's up to you whether you feel right to change the arrangement of plot a bit and add some emotional scenes in it to make it more lively and natural. That's all I have to say. I'll leave a review on webnovel if you like. However, I need your permission If I can put this up or not. thinkingAnyway, good work. You did a great job! Keep it up!
This novel is barely in the reading to pass time zone.The problem is that the world building and the mechanics of the magic system aren't defined in a consistent way. Which leads to the MC being awesome, but not comparable to anything.If one can reach a rank with enough training, why does the difference between spells matter so much? Why is it important to condese magic power? The author simply tells us it is and we as the readers have to accept it.An example is the fact that the MC always practices only the basics of magic and so far only one element. Why? Why are the basics so important? I understand that the basics can strengthen the foundation and this is important, but even the most patient and wise humans on the planet know that advanced techniques are important in any field, that is why they were developed.It feels like the only reason the MC practices at all is to get the system rewards, which is what actually gives him strength.It is like he goes to work every day for money, he doesn't gain anything during practice, he just gets rewarded for doing so.MC is also way to passive and mostly a nonentity in this story. We could literally exchange him for any other student and nothing would change.
pls end mylo's career that snake needs to know the only reason he can even score in the league was because mc feeds him goals not because of his own skill.
I motion for them to follow me, leaving behind the caretaker to continue working at the front desk as we enter the orphanage's main room, the Main Hall. I bring us to a gathering in the first corner to our right. There, is a low coffee table, with a mini flower pot of gardenias placed atop, and surrounded by worn out plush couches. As we sit down, I point to a group of plain looking kids huddling together in the far left corner.
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