Simple is better! Do not use big words and verbs in tenses that don't make sense! Even a comma can stop the flow of the story, and here it does. Please stop using big words just to show your vocabulary! It makes the story so hard to read. Cut the words that are put there to fill the page. It is a wonderful story with amazing potential but the writer has to realize that a phrase has rhythm. You block that rhythm with complicated words, commas that are missplaced or verbs in tenses that make no sense. A story is like a river. It has parts where it rages - that is where the reader gets to read faster, action is at the peak and you just want to know more! At the same time the river has parts where it is calm. Here the reader feels like wrapped in a cocoon of fluffy words. The immersion in the story happens here because this leads to the action! so please try harder.
This is a review up to chapter 53.I was a little doubtful at first, because the beginning was quite abrupt, the reaction of the MC was completely unrealistic, and it seemed very fast paced. But as the novel picked up and things progressed, I was actually really intrigued and could not put this down, wanting to see more of the development of the civilization in the sandbox. The introduction of a smaller sandbox with players was actually fascinating as well, although I had my doubts at first, I actually really liked what it added. In general, I would say this is very much the type of novel I enjoy, and though the beginning was rough, it ended up being very interesting and well written I think. I really, really, really hope this is selected for voting.
it's good at first when they're living their life as a novice business personalities while living as a good students as well. IT TASTED BITTER WHEN they have a competition against the amazon and jeff bezos himself. MENTIONING REAL LIFE COMPANY, REAL PERSON, AND PORTRAYED JEFF BEZOS as a petty and horrible character? what is this how Chinese makes their novel? where are the writing etiquettes? where are the codes and conducts of writing? what a bs author!
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I think the story will become interesting . The way in which the 1 ch describes I think that the story will create more susand thrill . I highly recommend this novel
The story Is brilliant, the characters are interesting, the MC grows slowly, and best of all the beasts are actual characters that are central to the story and are key to the MC’s strength unlike almost all other “beast tamming” stories.
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