Forbidden Love: Devil's Addiction

"But your still a kid, you still have to grow." The man says and then kicks Naota in the guts sending him flying into a house. "Man...I went too hard on him..." The man says as Naota falls unconscious inside the house.

Seeing her sitting their Noah sighed and speculated that his college is going to be far worse than he has imagined.

so to keep it simple, I've decided to take a step back correct each chapter and then repost the novel. I'll not ask opinions about this because it seems no one cares enough to respond or comment.

But as Gary had already ordered, there was little anyone could do to change it.

"Hi daddy. "

This world was created by 2 Gods, Light and Dark. Light and Dark are a Gods who have the appearance as a kid. Light like luminous figures, all of body is shrouded by a glowing light and Dark is shrouded by darkness, pure darkness.

I really enjoyed the story and action. As the story continues, the MC develops his harem. But i want more mature scene. I personally like harem. The story speed is fast but  it has a lot of potential for greatness.

Has potential but lacks character development.

Yo, you're doin' a great job, fam! Only thing is, the world-buildin' ain't all that, know what I'm sayin'? But it's still a dope story, and I'm feelin' the romance between them two. Shii got potential, for real!