Falling for the rejected son-in-law

Yet before long the four white figures were coated entirely by the golden radiance leaving Ryker fearful of what it could represent.

It was a Sunday morning everything was beautiful birds were chirping everywhere and everything felt calm except the MORGUE where Ray was getting destroyed by Krill while trying to escape. It wasn't anything new Ray had been there for a week and all the days were equally entertaining. He would get thrown in the dirt, get stomped, get thrown in the toilet. Once Krill spray painted on Ray's body "MORGUE's PROPERTY". After some times the guards were starting to enjoy it as a show.

"Okay, I get where you're coming from." She replied with a gleeful smile.

「Yo… this is kind of amazing」

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A good start. It's slow but it's okay . Author is taking his times. The only thing it's lacking is character interaction. But I think author will surely improve it.

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This novel definitely delivers an exciting premise, blending high-stakes business strategy with emotional depth. William’s journey is compelling, and the unique Dominance System keeps the tension high.However, the detailed business sections could be simplified for broader appeal, and deeper exploration of William’s relationships would enhance the emotional impact. Adding more personality to the Dominance System could also elevate the story’s complexity.Overall, a gripping read with great potential that could shine even brighter with a few adjustments.