The setting seems interesting and it has potential but needs serious editing. There are lots of grammar mistakes and unnecessarily long sentences here and there.
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This is a review of chapter 1 since that is all that is currently out. I didn't know what to expect going into this. But in the end, I came out satisfied. From an enjoyment point of view, I think this story has a lot of potential right off the bat. I am curious to see how the two will grow their relationship. And I NEED to know more about what lies in the astral state. Those entities are set up to be great threats so you better bring out their full horror!From a grammatical point of view. I think it's nearly perfect as is. The only thing I could be picky about is some small grammar points like punctuation and spelling. Some words could've also been used better but it still is fully comprehensible. I think proofreading once or twice will make this the best up-and-coming story!
the start screams beginner writerso you should fix thatand also I recommend talking about a topic for longer than:1chpt back in time2chpt meeting......3chpt attending.....4chpt reaching .......5chpt meeting betrayer6chpt revenge7chpt going back
Very underrated. I hope this doesn't get dropped because it looks like the author actually put a lot of effort into worldbuilding unlike most of these TNE-esque stories.
I’m Definitely giving this book a Five Star,I was reading the chapter one but had to quickly come to rate it….I love this book so much,well…lemme continue reading hehe 🙃🥰
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