The start of the story is great, but from about chapter 180, there are dozens of chapters with repeating contents, missing huge chunks, and having numerous chapters out of order. With such a large section of chapters being basically unreadable, there is no point to read this novel for free, let alone needing to pay for it.
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I like how Daren is being more of a reasonable person than Marceus. I have qualms about using mockery as an encouragement. Marceus! You can encourage people without teasing and degrading their person! Poor Daren. Evlin is such a savage! I can see why you have her as your favourite. Please give me more Lilith interactions!I've read the entirety of the updates and some concepts still confuse me for some reason, like the origin of beasts and spirits, or did I just miss them? Also, the consistent change of characters in focus is quite distracting. I suggest that you dwell on a particular group for an extended window before moving on to the next. The action scenes are quite abrupt, so it lessens the excitement. You do not need to use such complex words to relay an action; you just have to narrate to the readers what you're seeing in your mind as honestly as possible.I don't think that your grammar is that bad. Although, I have noticed overuse, misuse, and absence of punctuations in several passages. Punctuations are like the backbone of grammar. It allows the writers the opportunity to have better transitions. It is our job as writers to study te very grammar aids in out story-telling, and we are always learning. In addition to this, instead of using just adjectives, can you elaborate more on your descriptions? The readers would like to see the vividness of your imagination! :D I did not say anything out of spite. I hope that you take them as constructive. I'll be cheering you one! Your story has a great setting and there will definitely be readers who will love this utterly.
I really like the MC of this series; he's actually level headed unlike other novels where the author describes the MC as a genius, level headed and such but they're just really lucky they didn't get murdered If you like a badass MC with supporting characters with actual substance then this series is for you
The rain fell steadily, not a slow drizzle, but sheets of pounding rain. Thunder shook the trees, reverberating the high canopy of the forest that surrounded the kingdom. Deep in the forest laid multiple Skeleton Hunds that jumped from Pit to Pit. Their leader, a male with a leather jacket that was accented with wolf fur around the collar, was known as a conman and a thief among the townspeople.
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