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After reading 20 chapters of your story~First chapters are big headache. Your style is something hard for me. I don't talk about grammar or something...Later - story is really better to read. But still something tickles me. But hey! Idea is very good and I wish you the best! This is something fresh for sure. Just without first chapters.

Author here, I'd appreciate the feedback of chapters if you have the time. I'm a new author so I might tend to miss things. Leave a chapter comment or anything and I will rectify mistakes. Thanks.

I will be sincere here; I really liked the book. From Your writing to how you narrate the story, I loved the mild sarcasm used, Not many can do this, and you did it in the perfect way possible. For me, it is complete five stars; I can't wait to read more of this.

Way too many plotholes, the translation is garbage and some of the “China is the best and korea bad” at chapter 7 its a pretty bad novel dont recommend.

I need to know before I start to read. I love books like this hit will there be romance? and what kind of romance? harem? is he gonna fight for it or have it fall in his lap? thanks! love the premise though.

Only have 10 chapters so far so we still couldn't see well where the plot would dive into. The idea is interesting enough. The writing could still be polished up neverthelessKeep up the good work!

The Good: The editing rarely makes mistakes and the writing is straightforward. The story moves along at a pace that laughs at the slow pace Chinese stories love. The author seems to have a vision and is writing it. The Bad: We're definitely in wish fulfillment territory. The thing that seemed to take the longest was the MC getting his system. The MC borders on leaning on his plot armor and the 4th wall intentionally. Everything is kind of canned otherwise. Dateless loser? Quest to get one. Best friend shows up and immediately offers up his sister. Lots of things are explained by info dumps. The system is so helpful that the MC doesn't have to be smart. Multiple times the MC is in danger or is greedy and with a smile and raise of the hand, the system or the world bend to his will. I have put food effort into reading this, but even I have to stop after a few chapters to give myself a break. I've never seen MC struggle to overcome something and by now, I'm kind of tried of looking.The characters are uninspired. The author, as far as I got, worked too hard showing us that their talent was wasted telling instead of showing. Most of the author's weaknesses are in their interpersonal and cultural understandings.The greatest moment I encountered in the story, where the author was showing their spark, was when the FL spoke French. It was an opportunity for many things, but many, if not all, were wasted. The MC apparently spoke French too, a dead language, in the future, in an area with predominantly Chinese names. It could have been a moment to show the MC having a gap in his knowledge, and thus himself, or to use his skills or the system to overcome. Instead the MC was too cool for human weakness and was perfect. Yay.My final conclusion is that while I look forward to the growth of this author, I'll be looking forward to their next book, rather than more chapters of this one. Whomever their editor and proofreader is, they have my praise and I hope the author realizes the blessing they have.