DISCLAIMER: I only made it to around chapter 20, the review is based on those chapters.Oh boy. This novel is absolutely horrendous.To start of, writing quality is a dumpster fire, there are tons of plot holes and inconsistencies which you cover up by saying, ‘Mc who has no real life experience and only stayed home watching anime until the story started made a backup plan to the ****ty plan he made in the first place’ for example, him letting the other gangsters run away and *past* the zombies the Mc attracted w/ his gunshot instead of back into the theater. What was the backup plan anyway? Something along the lines of ‘he had a backup plan for that anyway’ just doesn’t cut it. And don’t even get me started on him not destroying his wrist with his shotgun. He shot it ONE HANDED. a SHOTGUN. instead this kid who happened to be the Mc has pinpoint Accuracy and insane logical thinking.Now, the side characters. Ignoring that for some reason they’re all female except the poor shop workout without a name, it feels like even the ‘fleshed out’ ones are just cardboard cutouts. And why did you think TWO chapters of FILLER BACKSTORY would be a good idea? Nobody cares about this character and wasting time isn’t gonna help.And please nobody even say something like ‘hmph, you are simply low iq without patience, the novel gets better you absolute cabbage..’ I don’t care if it gets better, the beginning is what hooks your reader.I’m not wasting more time reading more of this poor excuse for a novel.
I love the premise of this story. Reminds of me 12 winged seraphim's book: Supergene. Carry on writing, bro. Looking forward to seeing your books growth.
I never thought I would enjoy a Mafia story but I took a chance on this one . I enjoyed it very much . Well written with twistt and turns. Weak to strong FL.
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