3-15-7 Hirayama-cho, Nishi-ku, Tsu City, Mie Prefecture

Best ever game story fantasy. It have everything from drama, action, comedy, and suspense. Some part of the story have similarities to other stories... but this one have the best description of the story.

The syntax and formatting are almost as bad as MTL. I can't read it. Takes me right out of the story. Another thing I noticed is that instead of role-playing each character the writer makes it incredibly cliche. Young master cliche. It's just not very good. Keep at it, man. Get a development editor and some proofreaders. Use Google Docs and Grammarly.

Writer's Review...A easy going story about a reincarnated boy with dream of becoming the greatest cultivator in existence.And a book that held all the secrets of the universe

Only a few chapters in and here is my review. Professional story! That's all that comes to mind when I read this book. It's very detailed and has a nice plot. The author seems to have a set direction for the story, which gives the writing a sense of purpose (something not seen often on these webnovel books). I noticed a few mysteries already popping up that are itching for an answer.No big cons with this book. It's another great system read that could find a solid fan base on webnovel. I see a bright future for this book and the author. (4.8 whish it could be adjusted a bit higher)On a side-note : Idk how you will do it, but a story needs something that stands out in the beginning. Whether its a unique MC(blind, deaf, ect.), setting (growing up in a dumpster), or a mystery. You have some of these, but the truly great stories put their own twist. Just my little opinion, nothing more :)

You have slain...

"yes naruto does live in the west" jiraiya spoke  drawing gasp from the rest of the crowed

"Poi?"

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