- #1
- underbaked characters;
- did not properly show the change in character (the why to be exact for the change) for 3 out of the characters (it was too sudden for me, without much explanation) ;
- they decided to focuse on the melodrama and did not pay enough attention to the bonds between characters and write appropiate reactions for them (felt like the most important parts were rushed).
The characters have potential in the beginning and it's clear the author can write emotional scenes and is able to make some of the characters feel like, you know, not wooden spoons. But that quickly gets thrown out of the window.
All the characters end up acting OOC. A bunch of sh*t happens for no tangible reason. Characters are just therd, feel like nothing, just to push the plot forward.
Everything the author does feels like a mokery of their previous ability to write a close and realistic bond between thr brothers, showing the exhaustion and pain of having your only relative on borrowed time in the hospital. It tugs at your heartstrings because it's realistic and sad. Everything about that has a why, a reason, some push behind their every action. It's palpable, to me, that the author has the capacity to deliver something decent.
But I guess it's too much to keep that going, because after a certain death, everything is superficial and in bad taste imho. I will not bother go into details or why the story and flow and characters suck so much and how everything is way below lackluster, but I do want to mention that I found it incredibly dumb how ML is so close to the little sister, it's clear to some capacity he cares about her, enough to show up and see her several times, but when she dies he is 0% impacted and it's like the person that died had nothing to do with him.
The characters falling in and out of love is poorly written. And the dogblood, faceslapping and chasing is extremely unsatisfacatory.
[collapse]I will edit this for any mistakes later, since I am on break from work as of now.
