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Reading this made me feel very conflicted. I suppose weird is the best way to describe it. Couple of the characters are already showing HEAVY emotions with no real build up or introduction so it is just abrupt and off putting. Even if the HEAVY emotions are positive, it is yandere or in*est positive so not something you generally come out the gates with.Not sure about in*est because names used are not always definitionally correct. Nee-san may not really be sister from my understanding anyways.MC somehow feels like her personality contradicts itself which is again weird and off-putting.World building is awful to say the least. An example:Spoiler
Just because you are disposable to the company who is sponsoring you does not mean that they do not care what you do. Your actions reflect on them and the mu*ders, hostile take over of military operations, and shooting of military personnel (not sure if everyone died) that you attempt to commit while under their patronage will be linked to them. Especially the mu*der of a top student in a military academy under the patronage of another company. So yeah, writer needs to slow down on the first arcs progression and rethink the setting. First arc is also heavily reliant upon the fact that the adults cannot do anything to deal with somewhere around 5-10 teenagers with guns in a military compound because a "company" protects them.
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