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This is one of those stories where the author assumes the readers are children with Alzheimer's disease (a pretty small group). Somebody speaks one sentence with trivial content. Then there is a full page explaining that trivial content. Then somebody else says something, another page of extremely ban*l explanations and thoughts. A fight scene in bullet time - every tenth second is interrupted by pages of completely useless thoughts and "explanations" of stuff that does not need any explaining.I don't mind long stories with lots of stuff that don't directly drive a/the main story, not at all, in fact I quite enjoy it. However, 80% of what this writer writes can be completely ignored and you are still reading exactly the same story and you don't miss anything at all.It is a shame really, because this _could_ be something pretty nice. Although I found the start and justification a little too made up, trying too hard to get readers to feel something. Since the start can be easily skipped though - if you read the few paragraphs of summary you know enough, none of the details of the start are of importance later - this would not be much criticism. The really bad part really is all the really s*upid and useless explanations when instead the story should just go on. It's like watching commercials every minute of a movie. Or it's like a never ending tutorial mode in an RPG where you are forced to read every single explanation, like many long pages about what goblins are and how they look like etc. Etc. Even though pretty much anyone who has ever had any contact with this genre knows that already.
