Silver Girl, Crow Girl - Spoilers
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- #20
I think this story is good. You just have to see, feel and put yourself in the story.
This story isn't about power growth. It's about revenge.
There hidden elements in each character.
I especially like the parallel but contradiction between the 'the Hound' and Jabe.
Both of them loved a woman who married to another man.
Both of them protected and aided the child of the woman they loved.
I'm curious about 'the Hound' he has reasons underneath. But still his blind faith and devotion to the crown is what destroyed him.
He didn't care if he's doing good or not. Who wouldn't be when you're being influenced by the man you are serving, YUCK .
This story isn't about power growth. It's about revenge.
There hidden elements in each character.
I especially like the parallel but contradiction between the 'the Hound' and Jabe.
Both of them loved a woman who married to another man.
Both of them protected and aided the child of the woman they loved.
I'm curious about 'the Hound' he has reasons underneath. But still his blind faith and devotion to the crown is what destroyed him.
He didn't care if he's doing good or not. Who wouldn't be when you're being influenced by the man you are serving, YUCK .
- #23
- They are on their way to the destination, but was found by one of the noble (who is finding them on the king's order). This noble is an evil one, so Evelyn was about to kill him.
- Then he used a sucide move, which almost killed Evelyn, but Angsian used his body to sheild her on time. (This move is really powerful because it was given to him by the king, "to kill Angsian if needed").
- Evelyn and Angsian now separated from the rest, both injured. Evelyn clearly knows that Angsian is a boy, since his boobs disappeared now because the drug is about to wear off. They both have many internal dialogue, and somehow both realize their feeling to each other (?)
- After some first aid, now they all heading to the destination, though it's not gonna be easy now since they have to go through an enemy base instead of their original route
- The crown prince started searching for Angsian by himself. The king ordered the nobles to put the prince safety first, and behind the scene starting to try to kill Angsian.
- Angsian's father realized that he might not be the "real Angsian", since many things were off, but he remains calm and cold, "the decision is still the same". This is the newest chapter.
The story seems promising, but the problem is ... too many internal dialogue. And instead of showing how good the characters are, it's all someone's internal dialogue of someone else to portrait it. Moment between the two? They just stare at each other then a lot of internal dialogue happened, and then they realized they love each other. I was like "HOW???" Just how, it feels shallow to me, might be someone else's type though. Also each chapter is short that it feels dragging and tiring. Hopefully it'll be improved in the future, but to be honest based on the author's story telling style, I don't have much hope.
- Then he used a sucide move, which almost killed Evelyn, but Angsian used his body to sheild her on time. (This move is really powerful because it was given to him by the king, "to kill Angsian if needed").
- Evelyn and Angsian now separated from the rest, both injured. Evelyn clearly knows that Angsian is a boy, since his boobs disappeared now because the drug is about to wear off. They both have many internal dialogue, and somehow both realize their feeling to each other (?)
- After some first aid, now they all heading to the destination, though it's not gonna be easy now since they have to go through an enemy base instead of their original route
- The crown prince started searching for Angsian by himself. The king ordered the nobles to put the prince safety first, and behind the scene starting to try to kill Angsian.
- Angsian's father realized that he might not be the "real Angsian", since many things were off, but he remains calm and cold, "the decision is still the same". This is the newest chapter.
The story seems promising, but the problem is ... too many internal dialogue. And instead of showing how good the characters are, it's all someone's internal dialogue of someone else to portrait it. Moment between the two? They just stare at each other then a lot of internal dialogue happened, and then they realized they love each other. I was like "HOW???" Just how, it feels shallow to me, might be someone else's type though. Also each chapter is short that it feels dragging and tiring. Hopefully it'll be improved in the future, but to be honest based on the author's story telling style, I don't have much hope.
