Revenge wedding (manhwa)
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- #16
that is actually the 1 prince idea. he was obsess with Meridian but when Meridian turn him down, he scheme to get them married and killed. (i need to reread to remember, lol)
in their childhood, Demetrius found her crying. they be friend each other.He promise her to marry and love her (she thought her parent don't love her). but later, when he saw her again, it was when her power run amok for the first time(if not mistaken, she tries to imitated her father magic that created flower).Since he is still a child, his magic was not that powerful that it taken a toll on him and caused him to run a fever till he gone back*
*edited caused i was mistaken, demetrius return home not her
in their childhood, Demetrius found her crying. they be friend each other.He promise her to marry and love her (she thought her parent don't love her). but later, when he saw her again, it was when her power run amok for the first time(if not mistaken, she tries to imitated her father magic that created flower).Since he is still a child, his magic was not that powerful that it taken a toll on him and caused him to run a fever till he gone back*
*edited caused i was mistaken, demetrius return home not her
- #17
1) Thanks for the spoilers.
2) You were definetly understandable and I am the last person that should ever correct someone but since you wanted feadback here we go.
Your vocabulary is tecknically corect but some of your tenses are conflicting and some of the more tecknical aspects of the sentense structure are not being fufilled.
For the first sentense of the quote what you have is legable but a more corect way of phrasing it would be either 1) He does not care about a person'S lookS (the 's shows that the looks are something belonging to the person and in this context look is usually plural. I'm not exactly sure why but it might be to denote the multiple factors that are at play when considering how someone looks) or 2) He does not care ABOUT HOW a person looks (in this context the statement becomes not about how a specific person looks but shows that looks mean nothing to him in general. That is why you would not use the 's from before. The word about is optional and the sentense functions without it but adding the HOW gives context to the word looks and is used to fufill some type of sentense structure no one understands on anything but a subconcious level)
The other part I will coment on is the last sentense of the quote "He finaly decide to admit" so the word finally puts the decision in the past tense so instead of decide (which is present tense) you would say "He finaly decidED to admit" the Ed ending makes the word past tense to match the expectation of the word finally. The only other thing I would add to this sentense would be a qualifier for what he admited. Since what he is admiting is hard to pin down you either need to out right say he decided to admit his fealings about her in the sentense (even though it is clear from context clues what he is admiting you still have to define it in the sentense itself for the structure of the sentense to be considered complete) or you could use IT as a stand in for his fealings. So the final sentense would be either 1) He finaly decided to admit defeat. He loved her" or 2) "He finally decided to admit it. Then define it in the next sentense"
Over all notes: You are getting the structure of thoughts corect and your vocabulary is spot on. Its just some of the weird ways we use qualifiers and tenses that seam to trip you up. Truthfully thats the hardest part of english and even most native english speakers do not understand why the sentenses are the way they are we just learned what "sounds right" through exposure. I hope this was helpful and thanks again for the spoilers.
2) You were definetly understandable and I am the last person that should ever correct someone but since you wanted feadback here we go.
Your vocabulary is tecknically corect but some of your tenses are conflicting and some of the more tecknical aspects of the sentense structure are not being fufilled.
For the first sentense of the quote what you have is legable but a more corect way of phrasing it would be either 1) He does not care about a person'S lookS (the 's shows that the looks are something belonging to the person and in this context look is usually plural. I'm not exactly sure why but it might be to denote the multiple factors that are at play when considering how someone looks) or 2) He does not care ABOUT HOW a person looks (in this context the statement becomes not about how a specific person looks but shows that looks mean nothing to him in general. That is why you would not use the 's from before. The word about is optional and the sentense functions without it but adding the HOW gives context to the word looks and is used to fufill some type of sentense structure no one understands on anything but a subconcious level)
The other part I will coment on is the last sentense of the quote "He finaly decide to admit" so the word finally puts the decision in the past tense so instead of decide (which is present tense) you would say "He finaly decidED to admit" the Ed ending makes the word past tense to match the expectation of the word finally. The only other thing I would add to this sentense would be a qualifier for what he admited. Since what he is admiting is hard to pin down you either need to out right say he decided to admit his fealings about her in the sentense (even though it is clear from context clues what he is admiting you still have to define it in the sentense itself for the structure of the sentense to be considered complete) or you could use IT as a stand in for his fealings. So the final sentense would be either 1) He finaly decided to admit defeat. He loved her" or 2) "He finally decided to admit it. Then define it in the next sentense"
Over all notes: You are getting the structure of thoughts corect and your vocabulary is spot on. Its just some of the weird ways we use qualifiers and tenses that seam to trip you up. Truthfully thats the hardest part of english and even most native english speakers do not understand why the sentenses are the way they are we just learned what "sounds right" through exposure. I hope this was helpful and thanks again for the spoilers.