Xianxia: Tortoise  Longevity Art

As of Ch. 225 I’ll be honest I’m a little torn on my thoughts on this novel. I shall explain why.

First of all the overall concept of the novel is great, author does well to make sure there are no plot holes in terms of the MC’s decision making or how he advances in strength. The pace of the novel is also good, it’s fast enough that you can enjoy the progress and also understand what’s going on. The word count for every chapter is also really long, and finally the storyline itself is GOOD.


I’ll be real though, there’s a massive info dump in this novel. It’s not very noticeable early on but as you hit the later chapters, it goes into extreme depth with the MCs thought process, reasonings behind his actions and then over explains everything that’s happening.

I, for one, don’t mind info dumps if they’re done correctly. But that amount I’ve read, and where the story is currently at don’t add up. It becomes a pain to read at some point because you can see the MC being fleshed out and improving with every chapter but in the grand scheme of things the MC is literally going from a power level of 10 to 11 and the people he’s catching up to are sitting on 100. (This is an example, not a spoiler).

The crazy part though is that because every chapter is condensed (and long which I like), you can’t help but think that the story is progressing well when in reality there’s not a lot happening (much like DBZ fight).

Sigh aside from the insane info dump, the only other thing I can point my finger at is that things that happen in the novel seem erratic and displaced. For instance, the MC will be breaking through a stage, and then the POV will randomly switch to his senior sister going through her own troubles, and then it’ll switch to some random disciple from a different faction talking with his faction friend etc.

This just led to me skipping over some sections because I was just more interested in what was happening with the MC and I think that takes away from what the author was trying to do. Ultimately, the problems I’ve mentioned aren’t super big and can be improved upon and I think it’ll make the nocel much easier to read.

If you’re considering reading this novel just go ahead and have a read. It does start a little differently that most other novels like this start but the storyline starts to get interesting after the first few chapters (I think 10?).

My brain hurts.

Hey Vsauce, Micheal here. Our MC's journey is a coincidence. Or is it?

To an experienced authors, I want some advice for creating a novel. How many word counts do I have to achieve in each chapter? Do I have to start in building my characters growth? Advice in having better world building development? Something like that. This is a respectful request, I want to create my own novel that both of us can enjoy.I am creating as a way for my passion to be a writer and what's better than to ask you guys. I am thankful for your kind thoughts in answering my concerns. Hope you have a good day fellow readers and authors.

I just got bored, I wasn't for me, and I don't like musk, so seeing his last name again and again just irk me.

The start was great but he slowly loses his character and the story development becomes weird and un-understandable. Slowly I feel like his goal is not to be immortal it's weird he has a disciple or love interest I don't understand what's going on.

Enjoying work, please work on the issue of updates, been almost 20 days and only  close to 3 chapters released so far. What is going on man?

the most obvious flaw i can see are the way author word things. It's like reading mtl while you're out of it from what i can tell, just without the inconsistency of names, titles and etc. The second thing i'll say is that my suspense of disbelief immediately collapsed because of the implications from a couple sentences that relates to the science and logic of your world (the best wording i can do currently to get across my meaning). And yes while this is a xianxia novel and you shouldn't judge it based on real world physics but this novel also started on earth and should at least make some effort at being grounded in physics (even if it's the physics of sci fi media)Tldr: Wording definitely needs a lot of work and make some basic research on science because it reads like the science comprehension of a conspiracy theorist or someone who has enough knowledge of the existence of those words but only a halfway there to basic comprehension of them and how they relate.

Excited, here, why not add more than one chapter daily, the single chapter daily routine is too slow. Read through the work too before posting to reduce the small mistakes